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This is a response to the link. If you disagree with this article, instead of leaving pointless hate-spam, which is just a waste of time, please explain why you don’t like it, or any points I got wrong.

“The story is written compellingly enough that a wide body of readers is able to fit into the persona of Bella and love Edward.”
I hate to break it to you, but that isn’t a result of good writing. It’s quite the opposite, actually. Bella is a very one-dimensional character. She has no real hobbies, defining character traits, or even any specific physical appearance, and because of the series being written in first person, it requires essentially no brainpower to imagine you are her. Simply put, she’s a Mary-Sue, and that’s a sign of bad writing.

“Edward himself is written as the most desirable guy on the face of the Earth. He has vampirically enhanced features that are model-perfect, even more so. It’s not just his handsome face that is described in worshipful detail, but the sound of his voice, the feel of his cold and marble-hard skin, and even the smell of his breath. Adding in the fact that he possesses super speed, super strength, immortality, and the ability to read the minds of almost everyone but Bella herself and he seems like a godly personification.”
How could I forget? Meyer reminds us almost every paragraph Edward is present. Yet again, a sign of bad writing.

He is a vampire, which means he constantly feels the desire to eat people, Bella in particular.
This is not a flaw until something bad comes of it. There is a rule in literature known as “show, don’t tell.” Now, Meyer has obviously never heard of this because we usually get either get “tell (x), show nothing,” or “tell (x), show (y).” While Edward constantly says he’s dangerous, wants to eat Bella, and could kill her any second, he never acts on it. If he accidentally hurt her or tried to drink her blood, I would count this as a flaw, however, he doesn’t. He always shows perfect self control.
I do not count (1) his thoughts at the beginning of Midnight Sun because that is, once again, telling, not showing, (2) him trying to drink Bella’s blood at the end of Twilight because he was trying to save her life and was able to stop very quickly, or (3) the bruises he gave Bella during their honeymoon because he destroyed furniture instead of her, and bruises are not a serious/long-term injury.

“Bella, however, continues to pursue him and he changes his mind, deciding to indulge his obsessive inclinations by sneaking into her room at night to watch her sleep and covertly following her around, eventually seeking out a proper relationship.”
Unfortunately, the fact that Edward stalks Bella is somehow considered “romantic.” Words that come to my mind are “creepy,” “disgusting,” “sick,” “paedophilic” (he’s over 100 and she’s 17 = he’s a paedophile), etc. Take your pick.
This is an ENORMOUS flaw, and yet I feel I cannot count it. The author does not consider this a flaw; therefore, it was not addressed as such. Characters need to work on their flaws throughout the book/series/movie/*insert form of storytelling here* in order for them to develop and grow. Edward doesn’t ever progress from this, as far as we know, and because this flaw doesn’t impede his character in any way (except for receiving a lot of hate from antis and members of Team Jacob), I will not count this as a flaw.

“What is attractive about Edward as a predatory vampire is, I believe, the dangerous power associated with the character and its potential to be used maliciously. There’s something enthralling about imagining myself in the position of Bella, infatuated with this dark, beautiful, and powerful man and knowing he could kill her should he lose willpower for just an instant.”
If Edward actually drank human blood I would accept this as a flaw, but since he has perfect control, this does not count.
Also, Bella is a masochist, and apparently you are too... I’m not entirely sure if that’s a good thing.

“Edward: And the lion fell in love with the lamb.
Bella: What a stupid lamb.
Edward: What a sick, masochistic lion!”

Now, you may have noticed my use of the word “masochistic” in the previous statement. It is a prime example of Stephenie Meyer’s poor writing skills under the category us antis like to call ‘Thesaurus Rape.’
Masochism
mas•och•ism [mássə kìzzəm]
noun
1. sexual pleasure through humiliation: sexual gratification achieved through humiliation and physical and verbal abuse
2. psychological disorder: the psychological disorder in which somebody needs to be emotionally or physically abused in order to be sexually satisfied
3. search for abusive sexual partners: the active seeking out of sexual partners who will dominate, humiliate, and physically and verbally abuse
4. enjoyment of hardship: the tendency to invite and enjoy misery of any kind, especially in order to be pitied by others or admired for forbearance
Microsoft® Encarta® 2007. © 1993-2006 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved.

If this word was used to describe Bella, I wouldn’t even notice, however, Edward uses the word “masochistic” to describe himself. I don’t know about you, but I don’t think this is the proper description of Edward, and Meyer needs to stop using big words that even she doesn’t understand.

“Jacob and Quil are not creepy pedophiles, but rather boys who feel the kind of love of an older family member feels toward their young imprintees. They’re like the model babysitters and preschool teachers who seriously love their kids and want to see them happy, albeit with their love situated on specific people. When the kids age to the point that the average adult would find them attractive, it can be assumed that the shapeshifters will want to pursue a romantic relationship, but at that point the playing field is pretty much level and age is no longer an issue.”
This is called child grooming, and it’s a form of paedophilia.
I’d also like to point out here that Jacob would (most probably) begin having sex with Renesmee when she reaches the age of 7. Now, while you may argue that she looks 17, firstly, that’s a stupid argument because she’s still underage, and secondly, it’s not about how old you look, it’s about how many years have passed since your birth. It is still paedophilia!

“In response to the common complaint that Twilight is written poorly, I would have to say that the concept of good literature is highly subjective.”
You’re confusing “quality of writing” with “entertainment value.” Twilight is full of grammatical errors, misuse of words, dry dialogue, repetitive and long-winded descriptions, etc. This is poor writing. Now, you may still find entertainment in a piece which is written poorly, just as you can find a well written book to be completely boring; that’s how it works. Enjoying something does not mean it’s automatically good. For example, I’m addicted to the TV show ‘The Secret Life of the American Teenager.’ It’s my guilty pleasure. However, as I watch, I recognise that some of the actors are substandard, the plot is full of clichés, there are many cheesy lines, and whoever is editing this together is absolutely shocking, but that doesn’t mean I can’t like it, I still find it entertaining.
There are some pieces of classic literature which bore me to tears too, because everyone enjoys different things, but the quality of the writing is not completely dependent on the enjoyment someone gets from reading it; it’s based on the technical aspects of the writing. Stephenie Meyer is not a good writer, that’s not an opinion, it’s a fact.

“Finally, I have read numerous blog articles criticizing author Stephenie Meyer’s decision to incorporate religious themes and messages into the book series.”
I don’t have a problem with religious themes and messages in a book, but once male supremacy becomes one of those values promoted, I have to draw the line.

In conclusion, I find most of the hate against Twilight running rampant on the Internet to be overblown. Surely, Twilight is not the kind of epic, involved, and progressive story like Harry Potter or Buffy the Vampire Slayer. However, for what it is, which is an intimate fantastical romance story that can be appreciated by a large quantity of people, it is of high enough quality to achieve high popularity. This should be respected even if the story doesn’t appeal to everyone.
If everyone knows Twilight is nowhere near the standard of Harry Potter, why does Breaking Dawn have “Move over Harry Potter” printed on the back? Twilight is what it is: a cheesy paranormal romance for teens. It’s not a saga, it’s not the best love story since Romeo and Juliet, it’s not well written. Now, you may see this “hate” as being overblown, but that’s what it looks like when lots of people all feel the same way about it, and I doubt it will stop until the Twilight fad dies down.

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posted by jazzerpie
Edward's love for Bella is an undescribable sensation of protective instincts.Although he craves her blood he cares for her like god cares for the world.He would do anything for her even if it meant being away from him. Even if something good for her causes a burning whole in his body, he will do it...for her. The love for her can be described in such a way no one knows what it is.People think love is when your partner will spoil you and do whatever you want. But, its not. It's when you will do anything for that person to make them happy. No matter what it is.
His love for her is actually...well...love <3
edwards pov.

what was happerning? no matter how hard alice looked she couldnt see anything nothing of out daughter. i and bella were starting to get worried. in a matter of time she has gone from sight and from hearing range. i couldnt bare it.

bellas pov.

this really was something i couldnt handle. edward leaving me was the hardest time in my human life. now losing my daughter seams like the hardest in this life. the gapping hole is back and ontil i got my daughter back it was going to remain there. who lmows how long.

alices pov.

nessie was gone and i felt as uslass as i did when she was...
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posted by CarlislesLover
I'm soooo sorry I haven't posted in ages. It's a long story why but here's part 11.
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I stood up and kissed Jacob with all the energy I had. He pulled me in gripping to me tightly. I couldn’t breathe but I didn’t want to let go. Jacob started to pull me off of him, but I pulled closer. He was stronger than me so he managed to pull me of. I got really moody and stared at him evilly. “Bella honey I love you but you’re pregnant and we can’t kiss for so long when you’re pregnant”

“Stuff pregnancy”

“Bella I want our kid to survive as well as you. Do you have any idea how much I’m...
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posted by Tatti
Here's new chapter from Jasper POV, I hope you'll like it. Thanks to all of you who reads and comments it, I really appreciate that.

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6th chapter Learning

Jasper

"Now try from the left side" I advised Jalley and she knocked me down. I could block her punch very easily but I didn't - my little girl worked so hard today and she deserved it. I was surprised how quickly she learned every technique I showed to her, too bad, she needed more strength so it would be effective. "Enough for today?"
"Yap! I'm hungry" she ran into my arms. I lifted her cheerfully and we went to the kitchen. Usually Alice...
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posted by DestinyGirl
Hi! Thank you so much for those who read and commented!!!:D And now, here's more of Starlight!



2. First Day

The
next day, I rose up with the sun and Kyle and Annie decided to hunt before the first day of school——so I got ready. Annie had laid out an outfit for me to put on after my shower.

It was a lovely v-neck brown long-sleeve fitted shirt (and I always wear a backless tank-top underneath whatever I'm wearing since when I summon my wings, they tear right through the clothing) with blue jeans and the same brown sandals she wore yesterday.

I brushed my long, thick, mahogany brown hair which...
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posted by Tatti
Here comes new chapter and I hope you'll like it. Big thanks to all who supports my fanfic and all nice comments you leave.

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3rd chapter Running

Edward

I can see that Bella is worrying and I even can understand it - three half-vampire babies pops out of nowhere and only short letter from mysterious vampire Doreen informs us that they are abandoned and we should take care of them. At first, I was a bit suspicious too, but now I can't see what would be the point of leaving these kids if someone would meant harm to us. Volturi already know about vampire and human hybrids and accepted them as not...
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Hello, My Name Is: Death
Volume Four
BuffyFaithfan1
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[EIGHT]
    I quit crying a few minutes later. I just laid there for the few hours of time we had to ourselves. I didn't need to train, I was ready for this battle. The Final Fight, I would win. I was ready.
    And then, it was time to go.
    I checked my eyes so no one would ask me if I was crying, and I was good. I went to the weapons room, geared up, and grabbed my essentials: a cross-bow and a stake.
    "Let's do this." I said, and we started...
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posted by jacob_lover5253
Heyy I am back. The doctor said I did have a concussion so I had to be woken up multiple times last night. On the bright side I finished
Bella's POV... if this is to confusing let me know. -Kayla

End of Chapter 6. (Jacob)

I heard the door open as he peeked his head in. Great it's morning time already. As soon as Charlie went into the bathroom I jumped out of her window.

I walked around to the front of the house and knocked on the door. Charlie answered within minutes.

"Hey, Jacob, hold on I'll get her." Wow it's like he can read my mind. I heard him walking up the creaking steps. "Bells, you awake,...
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Hello, My Name Is: Death
Volume Four
BuffyFaithfan1
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[PREVIOUSLY]
    Hi, my name is Cyd, short for Cydnee, and one day while I was grocery shopping, a former member of the Death Clan of the Fallen threw a knife at my head. I ducked behind my cart, and ran out of the store once I saw the knife fly into a bunch of egg cartons. I went home, told my friend Tabra about it, and he came rushing over. He helped me get out of the aftershock feeling, and when we were eating chicken sandwhiches, mine was coated in poison. We then went to his apartment,...
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Hello, My Name Is: Death
Volume Three
BuffyFaithfan1
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[TWENTY]
    WHEN I GOT OUT: I dried off, got dressed, drained the tub, rinsed the extra suds off of the tub, dried my hair, ran my fingers through it, and went out into Jerek's bedroom and saw him waiting for me.
    "Hey," He said, and patted the bed next to him.
    He was shirtless, of course, and as I walked to him, I noticed that the tattoo on him was looking darker. Maybe I was just looking at it and it was popping out at me or something. Anyways,...
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posted by a-jforever
Heres part three.....I think. Enjoy.XXXX

What do you want of me?” I asked straightening up to try being civil.

“Ok you’re going to think me a complete freak when I tell you so come inside and sit down.”

“NOT INSIDE.” The bronze haired one protested.
Alice closed her eyes growing very still and then opening them.

“See Edward she won’t hurt Renesmee.” Edward nodded stepping out the way of the door. But whatever Alice had done hadn’t convinced him enough as he hurried in before us.

“Are you Phoebe?” A little girl with Bronze curly hair came round the corner smiling at me her...
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posted by Cullens4eva
I LOVE MY SISTER SOOOOOOO MUCH! We all screamed till our throats hurt, this is just amazing. As we stopped mom walked in and started to tidy up the lounge. To be honest I'd forgotten she was actually here.

"Girls that's enough. Now what's all this screaming about hey? There's no need for it." She finished doing some light dusting and sat down with a book. Probably some romance knowing mom, she was so predictable. Her life is a romance novel, her meeting my dad after nearly jumping off a cliff, falling helplessly in love, having 3 beautiful girls, living in a house to die for...

We all sat down...
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posted by BuffyFaithFan1
Hello, My Name Is: Death
Volume One
BuffyFaithfan1
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[ONE]
This was like no other Monday. Why you ask? Well, maybe if a knife flew at your head, you would agree with me. And it wasn't like magic flying, it was like an assassain threw a knife at my head and tried to kill me! At first, all I could think of was RUN, but later on I knew why he was after me. Here is exactly what happened...
I was driving to the store, and I got out of my car and went inside. I was almost done, I just needed milk and cookie dough, and they were in the same isle, so I picked up...
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posted by smileyfaceddude
I sighed with relief as the phone conversation was over and snapped it shut. God! Edward, is way too curious, and pushy, he asks too many questions, as if he was interrogating me; which he kind of was. I thought over tonight, and Renesmee's little adventure. I had to get rid of those bottles, so that would NEVER happen again, (and my new shoes, which i had just started to like). I'm not sure what would best for us right now, and Edward was asking what’s going on, and where precisely Renesmee was, I was glad he couldn’t read my mind from the phone.

Renesmee

Oh.
What a throbbing headache!...
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posted by amy_r_cullen
Edward's pov

"Daddy say somthing, you haven't said anything for about ten miniits i'll read you're mind if you don't tell me". Renesmee pushed.


"Sorry Renesmee i was just thinking can you read you're mothers mind". I questioned.

"Errr I think so why, do you wan't me to". Renesmee replied.

"well yes please, it's just you'r mother only lets me in her head when she wants me there, and the rest of the time I have to guess". I was trying to persuade Renesmee to help me.

"Why do you want to know what goes on in momma's head". Renesmee pushed.

"I just want to know if she is happy or not or if she worries...
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posted by CarlislesLover
Sorry I haven't posted this in ages.
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6 Years later.
I’m now twenty-four years old. I’m married to Edward and we live in Canada together. I still have my job as a fashion designer and I do model. But lately I’ve been asked to do other things. I got a letter through the post a few days ago about being in a film. I didn’t show Edward because I knew he would say no, so I kept it to myself. I really would like to be in the film, but it would mean I would be away from Edward for ages. I was already spending a lot of time away from Edward. He’s at home right now whilst I’m in New Zealand....
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posted by CarlislesLover
We finished shopping finally. “I’m sorry I have to go now”

“Ok, I’ll see you whenever I next wake you”

“Ok bye”

“Bye”

She left me going back to her grave. I didn’t know what to do. I couldn’t go back and see the faces of my family. Jasper was likely to kill me if I went back. Edward would be like oh Bella I love you so much none of this is your fault and Jasper would be like she knocked my wife unconscious I hate you and I’d be sat there like whatever guys leave me alone. So I decided to go back. I walked in and they were all sat in the living room on the sofa. “I’m...
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posted by CarlislesLover
This may sound like the end but it isn't.
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I did what I did with every other country. I saw the Cullen’s in the audience along with Charlie, Jacob and Billy. Jessica, mike, Angela and Eric were all there too. I knew so many people in the audience, but I had to ignore them and carry on. I finished at last and went back stage. My boss was going back early and said I could stay here for as long as I wanted. I got changed in to something else. Then Charlie walked in. He drove me home, the Cullen’s following behind. We all entered the house and sat down on the sofa. “What happened to you?”...
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posted by CarlislesLover
Sorry for the delay.
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We got back to my apartment and I got changed back into the clothes I was wearing before I had the piercing. “Now you need to go back to work to see if they have your dress for you”

“Ok” We drove back to where my dress was being made. “Aren’t you coming in Lucy?

“No sorry I have to go”

“Oh ok” I walked in to the large building and back into the lift up to the floor my dress was being made on. “We have finished” The man said happily as I walked in. “Go try it on for me” I went and tried it on. I looked in the mirror it was amazing. “Wow...
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posted by CarlislesLover
Part 11 finaly !!!!
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I was then blind folded and knocked out. I woke up in a huge white room. “This is where we’re going to train you to fight. Our way” Edward hadn’t even taught me how to fight yet but when the man said ‘our way’ it was obviously going to be a different way to how my family fight. Vampires started to enter the room. “Now watch us” A woman told me “And if you don’t you’ll be in trouble” She took a man and they started showing me a fight. It looked complicated as each one of them took it in turn fighting each other it looked so hard. “I can’t do...
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