Penguins of Madagascar Article: tortured....chapter 3

posted by spmana123

i was standing there, next to ricos corpse, tears coming down my cheeks, knowing that ill never see him again, never see hm smile, or do anything with me anymore, and i couldnt get here in time to save him, kowalksi and private were sitting next to his body, crying out loud. i snapped, and started running towards blowhole.

skipper:ILL KILL YOU!!!!

he dodged my attack and ran straight to the door, along with his minion, and locked us in so we couldnt get out.

skipper:OPEN THE DAMN DOOR YOU COWARD!! WHEN I GET OUT IM GONNA KILL YOU!!!!

i was banging on that door as hard as i could, hoping to get it open, but no luck.

my arms were begiining to become sore, but i did not care, rico was dead, and i wanted revenge for him.

blowhole: you three fell in to my trap! ill see you when you wake up!

then, suddenly, the room was filled with sleeping gas.

private:skipper....(falls to floor)

kowalski:ughh....(falls to the floor)

skipper:ugh....im....gonna...kill...you....(falls to the floor)

when we had awoken from our sleep, we were all in that room still, expect we were tied up to chairs, and kowalski sat in front os us, next to some...weapens....no, they were gonna hurt him next!

kowalski:skipper, what do i do?!?! im scared, i dont want to die!

skipper:calm down, nothings gonna happen to you.

then, blowohle and is minion came in, and blowhole told his minion to stand near kowalski.

kowalski:what are you doing!?!? stay away from me!!!

kowalski was struggling the best he could to get free, but had no luck, just like me and private.

skipper:DON'T YOU LAY A HAND ON HIM BLOWOHLE!!!

private couldnt stop crying, after seeing all this, im sure he was wanting it all to end.

blowhole:minion! grab kowalksi arm!

skipper:BLOWHOLE!!! STOP!!!

kowalski began to plead, begging for nothing to happen to him, crying to let him go, but blowholes minion had a strong grip on his arm and wouldnt let go.

blowhole:now....snap his arm as many times as you can!

and then it happened, the minion began to snap kowalski's arm in all ways possible, i could hear his crying and screaming, begging him to stop, hearing his arm snap and crackle made me cringe, and i couldnt do anything to stop him, i was powerless, just like rico...

blowhole:alright, thats enough.

the minion had stopped, and kowalski's arm was completly destroyed, all i could see was his arm, all bent up, like a knot, kowalski threw up from all the pain, and continued to cry while doing it.

kowalski:ugh...ugh...AHHHHH... IT HURTS!HELP ME SKIPPER PLEASE.....(cough,cough)

blowhole: alright penguins, we'll see you in a few hours to continue what we started.

and with that blowhole and his minion left again shutting the door and locking it behind them, all we could do was sit there and hope we all wake up from this horrible nightmare...only to realize....that this was real,and there was nothing we could do about it.

end of chapter 3.........

BOLTravolta This is getting good!

spmana123 Thanks, chapter 4 should be up by today for u to read

peacebaby7 I don't think I have any further advice following this chapter beyond what I already suggested. And, now that I've read all of the chapters that are posted, I'd like to say that the plot of the story is getting very intriguing. I can't believe Rico died! D: So sad. I do think you could add more detail so you could really get a tear in your reader's eye, though. Otherwise, please, never give up on writing. Just keep going and improving and you'll be writing to-die-for fanfics in no-time. :) And just so you know, it wasn't that I didn't want to read your story before, like I said I was busy. Ironically, I've been busy editing old fanfics on Word because I absolutely HATE how my firsts sound now that I've grown in writing. So NEVER feel bad if you ever think your fanfics are bad. They're really not, for one, and for two, no one gets it right the first time. Always remember that even the most famous authors had to learn beforehand. ;)

spmana123 Thanks for the feedback, it really helps, but I'm gonna leave chapter 4 as it is because I wrote it all, but I'll write chapter 5 like a novel format, thx again

peacebaby7 ^You're welcome. Remember, they're only suggestions. :) I can't wait to see how you do. :D But you [i]really[/i] didn't mind it? I do tend to ramble too much, and if you want me to shut up, just say it. XD

spmana123 It's ok, I like it when somebody gives opinions about my stuff, so that way I can make it even better, so what do you think of the story so far, what do u think will happen?

peacebaby7 ^Well, like I said, I think you have a very intriguing plot. Especially since not many people actually kill off any of the penguins (as far as what I've read, that is). It's kind of cliche, which makes your story unique. As to what I think will happen, I really can't begin to guess, which is a very good quality in fanfictions, in my opinion. I do hope Blowhole pays for what he's done, though. >:( So, really good job coming up with a storyline. Just work on your grammar, spelling, and format and you're golden. :D

spmana123 Thanks:) chapter 4 should be up really soon I'm typing it right now, make sure to stay on so you'll be the first reader

peacebaby7 ^No worries. I'll be on for the next couple hours before I gotta go to bed. :)

starthepenguin this is really good usually i try to avoid sad stories but this one is really good keep writing :)

Rainshadow999 Far out! I want to swear! Why the Hell am I a Vivid Reader?!?!?!? God, they don't even do this in Hell!!! Damn you beautiful angel, God really has cursed us, with images! Sorry but God am I a Vivid Reader…

Rainshadow999 Lol, reading what I said a day ago. I blame that all on Rainshadow, lol. starthepenguin@ Are you smirking???

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TBRttMoN: Chapter 2- Preparation

posted by Katie_Kat200

I already had this typed up, I just held it until later because I like to torture you guys >XD Anyway, hey look, she wrote another chapter! I wonder how this is gonna go? Probably terrible for her DX. I'm not gonna bother with OC's anymore. I'm just gonna go with what I have now. Lilly's awesome, and I have Marlene because she's awesome and understanding about... feelings... I think. Anyway! YES! As I have said before Marlene will be in the fan-fic, but I can garuntee there will be no Skilene. Hopefully, Marlene will find someone... Lets just get on with the story :D

Skipper’s head was...

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posted by AgentJazzy00

This is my first fanfic sooo quoting Thumper's mom from Bambi "If you don't have anything nice to say,don't say anything at all." XD
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It was a normal morning at the HQ;Skipper drinking fish coffee,Rico looking at "Kaboom Weekly" Magazine,Kowalski working on his latest invention,Private watching "Lunicorn"and Jazzy was drawing.
It was also a normal afternoon;training,saving,yelling at Ringtail for blasting his boombox.It twas night when things became abnormal.Kowalski finished his invention,the Star-O-Tron 2000...

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posted by 67Dodge

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posted by LifelessPenguin

MANY SAY THAT THE HIDDEN WILL BE REVEALED SOMEDAY. Enough for that. Just a reminder on what will happen in the middle of the story.

The name's Private. Has three more penguin friends named Skipper, Kowalski, and Rico. I'm nice, energetic, cuddly, and friendly. I have a British accent. Let us just say there is something hidden.

The sky gods granted Julien's wish of letting snow flakes fall out of the sky on the 21st day of May. This is the first time in American history that it snowed on May 21. Kids had a field trip in the Central Park Zoo. It was a fine day today.

Alarm bells rang. Sirens...

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posted by skipperfan5431

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posted by skipperfan5431

All Marlene could do was watch helplessly linto Lilly's angry blue eyes as she was being choked. She could hear the guys banging on the enterance to the HQ, trying to get to Marlene before their teammate mangled her. Then, Lilly did what she had wanted to do the whole time. She gave Marlene a BIG hug! (Don't worry you Marlene fans, she's still alive. *for NOW....*) "Huh!?" Marlene asked , releasing the air that had built up inside her lungs. " Come on! I wasn't gonna kill you! I just wanted you to tell me who you liked." Said Lilly with a smile. " I didn't want to hurt you. I thought the only...

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posted by JediPenguin16

Seven Abominations

Here's the rundown:

One-Oldest, black feathers and white belly, beak, otter ears, bird feet, paws, otter tail, Male, blue-eyes.

Two-Female, black fur with white foot, beak, otter ears, otter tail, flippers, bird feet, Female, blue eyes. Closest to One.

Three- Brown fur, gray feathery belly and face, brown eyes, no tail, paws, penguin beak. otter ears.

Two Fours. Four #1- Completely covered in white fur, brown eyes, otter face and tail, flippers, otter ears, bird feet. Female.

Four #2-Missing. Male.

Five-black, with unique white markings close to otter, brown eyes,paws, penguin feet....

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posted by Sandrei

CHAPTER 4: King Julien’s Fruit Salad
Marlene was just about to serve dinner for Skipper when they both heard a loud voice coming out from upstairs. They saw all sorts of fruits: bananas, coconuts, pineapples and pears, falling down on the ground one after another.
Skipper didn’t have to wait for King Julien to appear, he already knew who was the cause of all the commotion.
“Ringtail!” he cried, pressing his flipper to his aching forehead. “What is it this time?! Throwing fruits all over our HQ? What has got into you? Seriously, Marlene, that monkey is going crazier by each day!”
“He-heeeh!...

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posted by ThatDarnHippo

TDH: This one's slow, but the next one shall be interesting.

"And then she stuffed the device back under her pillow!" Skipper, Private, and Rico watched Kowalski in awe as he resites last night's experience. Nameless and Camille left for a stroll around the zoo about an hour ago.

Skipper, though satisfied with more proof supporting the case of Nameless being a spy, seemed a bit skeptical.
"You're sure of what you saw, Kowalski?"

"104% positive!"

"Okay, lets see." Skipper waddled over to Nameless's bunk. He picked up the pillow. There was nothing there. Skipper turned back to Kowalski, his eyes narrowed....

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posted by Aquade

Note: This chapter is not in Nathan's PoV. Read on and you'll see why.

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It had been a week since the mission with X. Private woke up first, much to his surprise. Stretching, he yawned and jumped down from his bed. As he looked around, Private felt as if something was missing. He looked around again and soon discovered what. "Everybody wake up! Nathan's gone!"

Wide awake, the other penguins flipped out of their bunks. "What?" asked Skipper.

Wordlessly, Private pointed to the empty bunk. Kowalski waddled over to it. He spied a note on the bed and picked it up. "He left a note."

"What does...

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posted by Aquade

"Does anyone besides me feel an odd sense of déjà vu?" asked Kowalski.

"I do," said Skipper.

Rico nodded vigorously. "Uh huh!"

"Just a little," noted Private.

"I take it you've all been here before," I said. "Turn left!"

Skipper turned left just in time. The rest of us followed. "Thanks for trusting me," I said.

"Instinct," replied Skipper. "Years of military ordering programmed me to obey a direct order on the first thought."

"Really?" said Kowalski.

Skipper glanced back at him. "Don't even try it, or I'll give you maintenance duty for a month."

He turned my gaze to me. "May I ask why you chose left?"...