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Who is Mary Sue, you ask?

She is a pest, a scourge, a CURSE upon the world of fiction; a dull, cliche character who mostly invades the fan fiction universe (especially in fandoms like Lord of the Rings or Harry Potter), but can also be found in original work, TV shows, books, movies, etc. In fan fiction, she's usually the fangirl's way of inserting herself in the story and pairing herself up with the cutest/hottest character. This infamous evil can be identified by the following traits:

1: She is stunningly/unusually beautiful. Oh she may deny it, claiming to be a "plain Jane" and modestly deflecting any compliments on her looks, but everyone else in the story will be sure to drool all over her. Mary Sue is perfection incarnate - perfect hair, perfect eyes (the kind that "sparkle like jewels" or "pierce into your soul"), perfect skin, perfect figure, gorgeous gowns/snazzy leather warrior outfits, cool-looking weapons, etc...though she may bear a striking resemblance to the author of the story. And she sometimes shares the author's name (that includes middle, last, nicknames, acronyms, etc.) Mary Sue could easily be described as an "author's pet" or a self-insert.

2: She has multiple special abilities or skills (like she can somehow "wield a blade" really well without years of training and experience...unless, of course, she's been trained by the best since age four). There's nothing she can't do or excel at, everything gets handed to her on a silver platter, and her Speshulness knows no bounds. She could be a shape-shifter with Super Powerful Shiny Magic and a wow-the-crowd singing voice, or a genius computer hacker who can play the flute and violin, has a black belt in karate AND can recite encyclopedia excerpts on a dime, or a half-angel warrior princess who sends the Bad Guys buggering off just by going all "echo-y voice and holy light"...you get the idea.

3: Going hand in hand with the above, she's always being uber-heroic, rescuing random people and saving the day. The fate of Life, The Universe and Everything depends on her. Without her Speshulness to aid the Good Guys in the epic battle, the Bad Guys are sure to win and the world is utterly DOOMED.

4: She's kind and virtuous (unless she's an EVIL Mary Sue) and has no big character flaws of any kind. (And no. Clumsiness and/or a feisty temper do NOT count; they're far too generic and only serve to make her look "cute".) She's usually either a "sweet angel" type, "mysterious woman" type or the "rebellious princess" type.

5: At least one character falls immediately/insanely in love with her, and vice versa (usually the hottest guy. Go figure.)

6: All the good characters in the story just seem naturally drawn to her (especially children and fuzzy animals). She's popular where it matters. EVERYONE likes her. Except the Bad Guys, of course...as well as any unimportant characters who serve no other purpose in the story than to be annoying and/or jealous of her utter perfection.

7: Sometimes there is a prophecy or legend about her. Usually it says something about her Speshulness, an all-important destiny, Twoo Wuv written in the stars, blah blah blah...

8: She is portrayed as being cooler/more mature or more important/powerful than everyone else in the story. Though on the flip side, she could also be portrayed as the poor, defenseless, yet ever courageous damsel-in-distress. Everything's always either about her or her love-interest. She doesn't know the meaning of "teamwork" and she steals the spotlight from everyone else.

9: She often has a tragic/angsty/mysterious past and her love interest has to "heal her wounded heart" or something. If she doesn't have a tragic/angsty/mysterious past, she always finds SOMETHING to angst about...and of course, her Twoo Wuv always rushes to comfort her. Oy.

10: She is so darn perfect and 2-dimensional that it's annoying and boring. She's either so perfect, so weird or so lacking in personality that the readers can't relate to her or grow to truly care about her as her own character. Strip away the beauty, the magic powers, the all-important destiny and the love interest and what do you have underneath? Virtually nothing.

Now that we've met Mary Sue, let me introduce you to her lesser-known cousins! Yeah, that's right...she has relatives.

Meet Gary Stu, the boy version of Mary Sue! He can be all of the above, as well as being the muscular, uberly-hot guy who's always saving the damsels in distress, bravely fighting the Bad Guys, hacking into computers like an expert and diffusing the bomb that's hidden in the wedding cake with the pair of pliers he just happened to have in his pocket.

Last and definitely least, there's Marty Sam. He's closely related to Gary Stu, only he's a lot more sensitive and angsty. Usually he has a dark, super-tragic past (like his alcoholic dad beat him as a kid or something) and he's always throwing melodramatic pity parties about how miserable and wretched he is. He swoons over the beautiful girl of his dreams and goes on and on about how he's such a HORRIBLE MONSTER who's oh-so-unworthy of her. He can be every bit as hawt as Gary Stu, OR he can pull a Hunchback of Dotredame routine, i. e. so ugly that his beautiful love interest can't help but take pity on him and fall in love with him for his "beautiful, broken heart".

So how can you avoid turning your characters into Mary Sues/Gary Stus/Marty Sams?

Well, one thing I've found that leads to a Mary-Sue is getting too attached to your heroine. You might have a brilliant back story for your girl, but does the audience really need to know every detail? You might have designed every ounce of her clothing and styled her hair just right, but is it integral to the plot? Probably not. A lot of the time what makes a Mary-Sue so awful is that so much of the focus is on this character that no one reading the story really cares all that much about her.

Another thing to keep in mind is to avoid having the character be too flawed. If you have a character that has a terminal illness, a bad back, is blind, can't hear, and is wielding a sword in battle and totally kicking butt and saving the day, you've got a problem. It's fine to have a character with one of those "flaws" or traits, but not all of them, and make them act accordingly. Make sure the flaws have something to do with the story and aren't just things you stick in to make her appear less perfect. Too flawed is just as bad as too perfect.

AFTERTHOUGHT: It should be noted that there IS such a thing as a "good" Mary Sue, and that there are a few exceptions where characters can have a lot of the symptoms above and NOT be a Mary Sue (like the elves in Lord of the Rings, for instance). There are many examples of "good" Mary Sues out there, such as Nancy Drew, Sarah Crew from A Little Princess, Buffy the Vampire Slayer and other characters. What makes them different from other Mary Sues is that they are all believable, vibrant, well-rounded, likable characters that people can root for.

Having said that, DON'T get cocky. These kinds of exceptions are rare. Most likely, if you have written a main character into one of your stories who possesses many or all of these qualities, you have created a Mary Sue (or one of her cousins). So get someone to look over your work, lest this infamous pest overtake you!

If you would like to test your character for Mary Sue symptoms, I highly suggest visiting these sites:

The Universal Mary Sue Litmus Test
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The Writer's Mary Sue Test:
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posted by tigerseye43
That night Jake laid awake, staring at the ceiling. In his mind he replayed the horrific scene of Whitney falling out of the car and seeing her limp, lifeless body lay there. Tear once again stung his eyes but he tried hard to fight them back. He got up and went to the closet, opening it and reaching around for a shoe box. He found it and pulled out a small blue satan box. He opened it as he sat on the foot of the bed. In the box was a gild Tiffany diamond ring. He had planned to propose to Whitney but it was to late.
A few tears ran down his cheeks as he looked at the ring, the way it sparkled...
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posted by LeoPenguino
Alright, well as all you naruto fans may know, the new movie Blood Prison has recently came out. I finish watching the movie and it made me completely mad...
The main conflict in Naruto Shippuden is Akatsuki and their plan to rule the world with the Eye of the Moon Plan. In this movie, the Grass Village wants to accomplish the exact same thing... but with a box that grants you any wish.
The Akatsuki is know to be the toughest and have the most skilled people in its clan... so why would they have not just used the box from the Grass Villa the from begging if it holds such immense power. Why would the masked guy known as Tobi go through the process of capturing all the Jinchūriki when he could just grant a wish for all his plan to happen...
This is what left me thinking what in the world is this...
posted by Skitty_Love
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It was a cool Autumn, just like any other. It relaxes me, feeling the cold press up against my face. My elder sister, Allisyn loved this time of year, because that was the time of the Archer's Tournament. I never really cared, even if she asks me to support her. It was such a dull & tedious event. I've always thought that it was lame, even when I was little. Not exactly my cup of tea.
"Honey, do you think you might feel like going to your sister's Tournament this year? I don't see why you never want to go, you could learn a thing or two from her, if you decide to learn how to handle a bow...
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posted by DxCFan123
MONTH 10

Kat's POV
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"I think they're dating..." some girl said to her friend as we passed them, holding hands. We didn't care what they said, and all of it was true. We were dating, we were in love with eachother. We kissed eachother in public, we held hands, we told eachother we loved them every 5 minutes. I didn't like to wonder what would happened when Will found out about this, or what I would do when his time came.

AFTER SCHOOL
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"Love you, Sadao." I told him.
"Love you, too, babe."
We kissed eachother, and thought of what to do, considering it was Friday. "We could go out to eat again!" I suggested. "Just somewhere except for that sushi place, I'm getting tired of that place." So, we decided to go to a pizza place a couple blocks down.

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Excuse the shortness of this chapter.
posted by GryffindorGirl2
Jasmine's POV

The freezing darkness pressed down on me,Harry,and Dudley.
"S-stop it you two.Now.It-it's not funny." Dudley stammered.
"We're not doing anything Dudley!" I shouted over the wind.
"I swear,if you don't stop it,I-I'll hit y-you." Dudley said again.
"Shut up Du-.." Harry began.
WHAM!
The sound of Dudley's fist connecting with Harry's jaw sounded beside me.
"Ow! God Dudley!" Harry shouted.
Before I had time to react,my feet were kicked out from underneath me and I fell to the ground,slamming my already hurt head on the ground.My spine seemed to jolt out of place,then back in,making me moan...
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posted by GryffindorGirl2
Jasmine's POV

Harry and I walked to the park.The hot,dry,humid summer air blowing at out backs.My hair wipped around me,hitting my face and getting in my eyes.No sooner had I moved it away,that the wind blew it back.My sweat shirt fell around my shoulders,but I pulled it back up.The wind continued to blow,and as I listened,fell into a rythem.The sound of Harry and mine footsteps falling on the quiet street sounded like clapping.I raised my arms to the sky and began spinning in circles as I walked.I began to sing,my voice blending with the wind and our footsteps.
"What doesn't kill you makes...
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posted by DarkGirl23
The first time I went on a hunt, was the first time I really saw death in any sort of being’s eyes.
I don’t know who I am, what I am. I mean, I couldn’t possibly be considered part of the Hunters. Yet, their blood runs through my veins. They may own an incapability of understanding the true emotions of life, for we have been Genetically-Altered Experiments planned all the way back in 2012. Our bodies and our emotions have become that of a true fighter, a warrior of destruction itself in a world of Nature’s grace that becomes altered in the palms of our Humanoid Species.
We can defeat...
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Over most of the left side it's face was a skull mask, three long tusks, the shortest one in the middle, the other two were the same length.The room grew colder, Meggan shivered."Wh- what do you want?"Meggan asked.The room got cold enough to see one's breath."Your mortal soul, why else?"StarBurst told her, his teeth as sharp as a razor-edge.Meggan scrambled against the wall, she had her eyes wide open, her mouth also wide open.StarBurst climbed onto the bed, he was the size of a wolf.He put a paw over her heart, then faded away.Meggan felt another stabbing pain in her heart.She hit the nurse button and passed out again.

The next day, Meggan woke up at home.Another wolf like demons sat at the foot of her bed.She rubbed her eyes, it was still there."Wh- who are YOU?"Meggan asked scaredly."I'm Outsider."The demon said, then it wandered around.Every step it made shook the ground a bit.He walked through the wall, and didn't come back.
StarBurst
StarBurst
The Demon Locked Into The Heart


Meggan was your average school girl.Blue glasses and short dark blue hair, Meggan was always the one they picked on.She only talked when her best friend was talking to her.Her name was Claire, Claire was the happy-go-lucky type of girl.Claire's joyfulness has gotten her out of arguements every time she tried.Meggan and Clair were walking down the hall as usual."Hey Claire?"Meggan said looking over to her."What?"Claire asked looking over to Meggan.Some random kid walked by and knocked the books out of Meggan's arms, Meggan gave a glare that just said "Drop dead,...
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posted by GummyBears_11
As screwed up as my life was, I always found joy in singing. I sang everyday, no matter what happened. Singing helped me remember a better time. A time when 'he' wasn't around. A time when my mother WAS around. A time when I wasn't alone.

Chapter 1- Ring Around The Rosies

I jerked awake. I was covered in cold sweat, and I still had flashbacks of the nightmare stuck in my head.

"No! Mother, please, don't go!"

There was no use in falling asleep again. It was already 6:40, and soon enough, my stepfather would barge in my room, yelling at me to get up, calling me names, threatening to beat me....
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Let's say your walking down the street and you see a girl on the other side of the road.Looks like a sweetheart or a nice person wearing a light green sundress. At first glance you don't give the girl a second thought but if you looked more closely you would have seen the biker boots and the heavy jewelery. And yet her face and her dress looked like sunshine.
You may think the girl weird or strange but that's just how she dress. Though you don't have the guts to go up and ask her about it. Why? Because it's rude to ask why she dresses like that and you just want to keep on going to your destination....
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"Oh my gawd! Lauren, you like Jack?!" Said Koshi. I blushed and replied,"... Yeah, so what?" she gave me a puzzled look, and then she caught up with my question of curiosity and rolled her eyes and said, "So what? Do you even know the reason why it's a problem?" I shrug and say, "No," her face starts to get red like a cherry. I cross my arms, and shifted my weight on my left leg. "Why? Is it a problem if I like Jack?" Koshi looked down and looked at me like I should've heard."He wasn't a good boyfriend." I raised my eyebrows.What? Why hasn't anybody told me that Koshi and Jack were going out? Why? "Oh.My.GAWD!"
posted by Skitty_Love
Celeste's POV

As I walked through the leave-crunching forest, a familiar scent started past my nose. "I know this smell, I just can't name it.. Hmm..." I tried to forget about it and move on but it began to bug me. Soon after I stomped through, the irritating smell getting my temper up. "Teehee, w-wow.. I love this spell book my father gave me!" I perked up anxiously. A voice? A-a girl voice.. She didn't sound like anyone I knew.. Should I find her? What if shes a wi.. No, she couldn't. I cautiously walked toward the voice, and you know what was weird? The smell began to rose. I was itching...
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posted by sawfan13
I got out my cooking bag and my little travel oven. I was going to do my best making Lil and Howl's wedding cake. I know I seem like a nerd taking a travel oven and a cooking bag, but I love cooking wherever I go. It's weird, but you never know when you need it! I was rummaging through my bag, but there was one important thing missing. The flour. I can't make this cake without flour, and wedding with no cake just doesn't make any sense to me! I just wanted to get started on it while Howl is teaching Lilith to vine swing. Not to sound rude about my sister after reconciliation, but Lilith isn't...
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posted by Insight357
I sat on the floor, looking outside. It was snowing, and you could see icicles hanging from the top of the window. It was so cold in the room I could see my breath.
    I looked around the empty room; I was alone. In that moment I felt if nothing were inside me. As if, something had devoured my soul. I was resigned, and nothing seemed to phase me.
    Suddenly, lightning flashed, and hail came down. Making pops as it hit the roof. Black clouds filled the sky, making for an ominous feel. I stood, and went to the window, to find the snow gone.
    The...
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posted by HouseMindFreak
Chapter 13






The hallways of the hospital were dead silent except for the beeping noises of the heart monitors from the patient rooms and random coughing. Jax slowly and silently stepped passed each door not wanting to spook anyone and draw attention to him. So far it was working.
Finally, he reached an elevator and pressed the down button, hoping that no one was on the other side of the door.
The door binged loudly as it reached his floor and Jax held his breath waiting to see a doctor or security on the other side. It opened and he let out a huge sigh to an empty elevator.
He stepped inside and...
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posted by sawfan13
Howl looked over at Debbie, as Lilith was gone helping the baby monkey find his mother. He looked over at her and said,"I want to marry Lilith." Debbie stared at him and said,"What?" "I want to marry your sister, Lilith. Please." Debbie stared at Howl for the longest time, as Howl patiently waited for her answer. Debbie smiled and said,"You really do love her, don't you?" Howl smiled and said,"Yes. She's my everything. Without her, I would be alone and not know what my purpose in life is. Now I know, and I know it from looking at her and from what she has taught me. I always thought my life...
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posted by sawfan13
I awoke to Howl's victory yelling. Urgh! I don't care how awesome and attractive that yell may be, but it is WAY TOO LOUD for early in the morning!!! I threw my pillow, trying to hit the tree branch, as my sister woke up, doing the same thing. Debbie yelled,"Howl! You woke up me and Lilith! Look, your yell is cool and all, but not so early in the morning!" Howl looked at her and started growling and barking like a wolf, but Debbie was brave and said,"Don't you give me that! Stop giving me that dirty look! You know better than that!" I started giggling and said,"So what, your Mother of the Jungle,...
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posted by HouseMindFreak
Chapter 8

The highway was strangely quiet tonight.
On a typical Friday night Officer Ranald would see 20 cars every 5 minutes but since the early evening there hasn’t been one car except for a few semi-trucks. In his 25 years as an officer, this was a rare occurrence.
His patrol car sat parked in a shallow ditch in the darkness so that any driver going over the speed limit would never see him until it was too late. One of the many perks of being a highway patrol officer.
But tonight it was boring him to death.

With his window rolled down the outside air was cool and fresh making him feel more...
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posted by sawfan13
Night. Quiet, except for the sound of people walking along the streets of New York. The man in the shadows, trying to win back his fiance'. He was sorry for what he had done to her, but she does not want him back. A black eye on him, from what she did. But he deserved it. He wasn't a very good person at all.

I was relaxing while Howl was looking around my bedroom when my cellphone rang. The caller I.D said it was Casey. I was relieved. It had been ringing all day because of Adam. I picked up the phone to answer Casey. I'm mentoring her for a mentoring program I do during the summer. I've been...
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