Writing Article: Broken Dreams Chapter 16

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posted by BellaSwan636

Serena

I couldn't tell my mom. I tried, and I just couldn't. What's worse, she didn't try to make me.

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Later, I had cried out every tear I had, but it wasn't enough.

Just as I'd parked my car outside the complex where I now lived, a spark of hope flared inside me.

No one ever would know.

I sprinted up the stairs, I just couldn't handle the idleness of taking the elevator. I needed to run.

I burst through the door and immediately headed for the hall closet.

I pulled out a large suitcase and stuffed as many of my clothes as I could in it.

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Finally, I was packed. But I still wasn't done. There was one last thing I needed to do.

I ran into the kitchen, grabbed a pencil and pulled a pad of lilac paper out from under the phone.

I knew who would come looking for me first.

Shaun, I wrote.

I'm leaving. Please, please, don't tell anyone why. Pretend you don't know. Act like I never existed.

Don't come looking for me. I want you to finish college, and move on. You deserve happiness, which I can't ever give you, no matter how much I wish I could. And don't blame yourself. It's my fault. It's entirely my fault.

I still love you, and I always will.

Serena.

A small tear fell onto the page. I turned my head, and ripped the page from the pad.

I pinned it to the door of my bedroom.

I glanced back over my shoulder one last time, as I closed the door of my apartment, and closed the door on everyone I'd ever known and loved.

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Nightfall #1 (Complete Rewrite) Chapter 12

posted by adamk

CHAPTER TWELVE:
Danny wakes up around noon; he seems dizzy the moment his eyes open. I close the blinds swiftly. “Are you okay?” I ask stupidly, already knowing the answer. Danny is in unimaginable pain on the inside. The infusion I gave him was quick, thus the change was slightly different than most. “Horrible.” He mutters, grabbing his head. I lean over to look at him. The change has affected him, I note, and there may be different after effects. After all, his transformation into a vampire was as I mentioned before, highly unusual. “Ashley.” He says, finally placing a name to...

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Nightfall #1 (COMPLETE REWRITE) Chapter Eleven

posted by adamk

CHAPTER ELEVEN:
OCTOBER 30, 1995:
The sun rises over Crystal Falls; the chill of the autumn wind fills the air outside. Vampires hate the cold. As I ponder what to do, Danny lies asleep on the couch, still unconscious. The effects of my blood have taken a toll on him. I ponder whether to continue my investigation at the high-school. Doing so would put Harold at great risk. Yet, somehow I think Pike has plans for the students. I look at the calendar. It is the thirtieth, the day before Halloween. Halloween, the anniversary of the day I made my first kill. I reminisce once more into my past.
ALBANY...

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Fifty shades of Grey or Fifty shades of rubbish?

posted by nimone

I have just read a paragraph from what could possibly be, the worst book that I have seen in a long time. Fifty shades of Grey does not even have a good story line. The man Mr Grey is a complete pervert that is obsessed with SM. He meets this woman, warns her that he is a creep, and the woman stays!
WHAT THE HELL!
The novel apart from this is filled with parts where Mr Grey has sex with this woman practically everywhere in his house. Yet many woman seem to love this complete piece o rubbish.
And that is not even the worst part. The novel is full of the worst grammatical errors I have ever seen....

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Nightfall (COMPLETE REWRITE) Chapter Six

posted by adamk

CHAPTER SIX:
ASHLEY’S POV:
2:10 AM
OCTOBER 28:
It is only a little over a half hour later when I see a car pull into the parking lot. I note the driver pull out a flashlight and climb out. He has long dark hair, is skinny and wearing glasses. It is Harold. I motion him over to me. He walks over and hands me a pair of jeans and a sweater. “It’s all I could get in a hurry.” He said. We walk over to a restroom, and I ask him to wait outside while I change. By now he notes I am covered in blood, but I promise to answer everything when I return. After about five minutes, I return and find...

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Nightfall #1 (COMPLETE REWRITE) Chapter 2

posted by adamk

CHAPTER TWO:
SANTA BARBARA, CALIFORNIA
OCTOBER 26, 1995:10:57 PM
It is nearly eleven when I pull to a stop outside of Saint Packie’s Bar in Santa Barbara. On this particular evening, I feel like doing some vigilante justice, if my sources are correct, which of course they will be, my victim will be inside the bar searching for his latest victim. Such irony, I think to myself. He will soon die in one of the most horrible ways imaginable, although this is only my plan A. If any problems proceed, there are always better ways of dispatching my victims. I show my ID to the security officer, and he...

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NIGHTFALL #1 (COMPLETE REWRITE) CHAPTER 1

posted by adamk

NIGHTFALL: A NOVEL BY AXEL MCCORMICK
Copyright: 2013

CHAPTER ONE:
CRYSTAL FALLS, CALIFORNIA
FEBRUARY, 1850

The year is 1850. My name is Ashley Garland; I live in the small town of Crystal Falls, on the west coast of the United States. At the moment, I am being hunted, by what I do not currently know. All I know at present about my foe is that I fear for my life. In fact this whole ordeal has been about a week in the making. About a week ago, the people of Crystal Falls were gathered in the town hall, when a man suddenly began pounding on the door, pleading for help. After some of the citizens finally...

Pretty Little Nightmare Chapter 1

posted by Dreamcatcher26

Khloe, Caroline, a few other friends and I flung ourselves down the street to the hottest club in town devils lounge, I was thankful that the bouncers here were as dumb witted as everywhere else about fake ids.

Inside the club Icy, smoke lurked on the ground; coloured lights gave me a spontaneous rush of excitement. I looked at the seas of bodies that were grinding on the dance floor, an arm snaked around my waist before spinning me around to hold me in their grip.

'Scarlett babies you joining us tonight for a hit?'
I scoffed and pushed Eric of me.
‘Control your brother Khloe before the dog gets...

Excerpt of 'The Story That Remains To Be Named'

posted by JosephineSilver

So, hi.
To those of you who don't know me, my name is Josephine. You can see me mostly hanging about the Heroes of Olympus spot.
I write mostly fanfic on fanpop (If you want to see my original work check out HousexofxNight on Quizilla), but my friend annabeth523 asked me to post this online so she could read it.

Basically put, this year, on the first of September, I turn sixteen. My goal is to have typed 100,000 words of a single story by then. I started typing on the 28th of December 2012 and I am just over 42,000 words in. I am now editing what I have written so far.

What you are about to read...

An Introduction to my Upcoming "Fallout" novel

posted by adamk

First off, to those of you that know me, I haven't posted at all in awhile, I'm aware my "Nightfall" series hasn't been updated for those of you that liked it, but since school started back, I have had hardly any time to write anything. I WILL get back to posting on "Nightfall" if anything else for the sake of completion. But I also discovered the marvolous "Fallout" series a few months back, and decided to try to make a novel out of it. For those of you not familiar with the series, "Fallout" is a series of games set in a post-apocyloptic future, and finds a custom made protagonist made customly by the player dealing with life in the now wastelandic USA. My story is loosely based off "Fallout 3" but with major differences along the way, so the story is original in that aspect. If you guys will read the story, I will make it as adaptable as I can for those who are not familiar with it. Please leave comments, so I know whether or not I should post it. Thank you. -AdamK

Dragon Soul Part 3

posted by dragonwriter

After changing back I saw the remains of that man. It was enough to make me sick. I just fell to my knees looking up at the sky. A girl walks up beside me and kneels down. "Don't look so down." I go to look at her and no one is there. I look back up at the sky waiting to hear that voice again. There wasn't any sound anywhere around. Out of the silence i could hear a faint breath from the night behind me. I move to the right when i hear the shot.

It grazes the side of my head and i fall to the ground. I hear footsteps running towards me as my eyes slowly close.

Chapter 2: Trust Graven Miseries

posted by FanFictionsOnMe

This morning,I woke up with tears flowing in my eyes. I'm in a dark alley...alone. "Tazz!" I yell for help. "Mew!" As in,"Help me!" The dark alley was empty. Just me. my back was bleeding. My heart was pumping fast full of fear. I get up off the ground and wobble a bit. I see a little light flickering in a corner. I walk over to the light and...there is a flash light flicking on its own. I run to where I was at first. I start to cry and I feel a tap on my shoulder. It's Laiz! I scream and scream. Laiz picks me up and throws me in his limo. I try to break the glass on the window. I keep screaming...

Chapter 1: Trust Graven Miseries

posted by FanFictionsOnMe

I shrug my shoulders. "I'm being honest with you.I never did it.Why don't you believe me?" The police men grab my arms and lift me up high. All I can feel is their clinched wrists and heavy weight under me. They drawn me to the Lab Emergency Room,and...gave me a thick shot with Ketamine inside. A drug that makes your memory leave you and passed out. It did so to me.

I hear footsteps coming from the metal door and woke me up. I thought it was a dream at first site of this morning. The step's sounds came closer and closer. I'm half asleep and I don't remember anything. How to talk. How to eat....

The saviours(this is a bit like my story on true writers called the dark of writing so please read)

posted by 1999jacko

sit back now young ones while I tell you the story of the first Saviours.
The Saviours are a long and old race reaching back as far as the dawn of time they behold powers beyond our imagination. They can give life ,they can make you happy,sad or whatever they wish but most of all they hold the powers of truth, light and life. For years they have been fighting of the men of evil, called demons, and they have been winning but only just. The demons though they are biding their time waiting for their chance to shine and rule, the demons are stronger than any Saviour the powers they contain in their...

Sky Status(For Only Vietnameses) (From HHT Magazine)_Chap 2

posted by ZekiYuro

Mai kiểm tra Sinh.Đứt đừn.
Keke.Bao giờ cho đến nghỉ hè!
Học học học!!!!!!
Bùn ngủ +_+
Chỉ cần 7 điểm thôi,con sẽ nhịn cơm 3 ngày!
Nhịn cơm=ăn pizza;))
...
Đấy-đống status của thằng Vương Dương(rất dở hơi và cứ 15 phút lại thay đổi 1 lần)mà nguyên 1 đếm thức để học bài tôi dã dỏng cổ ngắm nghía.Lúc đó tôi thậm chí còn nghĩ:"Mình mà có SSM á,còn lâu mới giăng lên những câu nhảm như thế!".Nhưng tất nhiên là mình ko có.Tôi có phải là nhà tỷ phú như nó đâu!Biệt...

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The Eagle (this is a poem,a little dark too)

posted by CapShunsuifan13

THE EAGLE

Red splatters the walls, the floors...

The Eagles yellow eyes
His claws tear, his beak rips

His malicious intent present in its speech
His black shadow falls
Its darkness full and everlasting

Leaving no physical mark but
Its evidence in the eyes of the Knowing
Only they can see
Only they recognize the signs

Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder
Pain is in the mind of the sufferer
Invisible and dangerous
It strikes silently
Clouding the mind

It consumes
It feeds
Never backing off
Happiness becomes the past
Anger the present
What of the future?

No one knows
No one can know
No one understands...

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Sneak Peak of My Book/Novel "Remembering You"--Chapter 1

posted by PonygirlCurtis7

Chapter 1
October, 1964

I lied awake on my bed.

I couldn’t sleep.

My mind was wandering, racing to different topics at the same time. I couldn’t stay on one subject in my mind for more than ten seconds. I was restless.

Just then, out of nowhere, I remembered something that I particularly didn’t want to remember. But I did anyway. It was something that I hated thinking about, and something that I thought about all the time. I got up, clad in only a pair of jeans, and walked over to my closet and turned on the light. I pulled down old, dusty boxes and yellowed papers off of the closet’s shelf....

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Forbidden Love (CHAP. 2)

posted by DxCFan123

Since I will usually end up leaving Fanpop for a month or two then come back with a new story, each chapter is going to represent a month. So, let's say, by now, Kat and Sadao are really close friends, they do everything together, AND FRICKITY FRACKITY FROOK

Kat's POV
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"No, you idiot, your doing the bow-hand all wrong!" I yelled at Sadao, and fixed the positioning of his fingers on the violin bow. "Even I know how to do it correctly, and I just started a month ago!" I got out my violin and did all the positions, then counted down. On 2, he asked me, "Can you sing it to keep...

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No crying, hating, or any strong emotion.

posted by NormalcyIsDead

You say you want a look into my life
Go ahead, there’s nothing to hide
I’m not abused by parents, a good life is apparent
In me; troubles come, I think ‘Eh, it’s Life.”

But that’s my problem: I don’t know when to stop
My thoughts go from one idea to another, they hop
If I think there’s something to worry about, I doubt
That some people would be as whiny as me.

While I’m worrying about a Civics test
Few other girls get any peaceful rest
From caring for their family, uncharacteristically
Still trying to be the best through the stress

My friends look up to me for my calm head
I’m THE person...

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The Wrong Place At The Wrong Time - Chapter 2

posted by Triscia95

9:30 A.M

An hour and a half later the bell rang and we were released from class. "Wow, I feel so amazingly smart." Nick said coming up behind me as we exited the class room.

"Why's that?"

"Because I knew every question, either that or I totally flunked it thinking I did an amazing job." Nick wasn't the smartest student in the school but he passed his classes. "I'm sure you did fine." He didn't look convinced. I grabbed his hand and gave it a light squeeze. He smiled "Well I'm off to biology." And I was off to P.E. in the opposite direction.

He held my hand till we were to far apart that our arms...

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A Dark Mark and a lightning bolt scar.

posted by GryffindorGirl2

Jasmine's POV

Harry and I walked to the park.The hot,dry,humid summer air blowing at out backs.My hair wipped around me,hitting my face and getting in my eyes.No sooner had I moved it away,that the wind blew it back.My sweat shirt fell around my shoulders,but I pulled it back up.The wind continued to blow,and as I listened,fell into a rythem.The sound of Harry and mine footsteps falling on the quiet street sounded like clapping.I raised my arms to the sky and began spinning in circles as I walked.I began to sing,my voice blending with the wind and our footsteps.
"What doesn't kill you makes...