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Can anybody tell me if this work is good enough to upload on FanFicion, or if it's just crap? It's the first half of chapter 1 to a story I am writing, however I've always had a problem with writing. I'm Dyslexic, so my work always comes out as a jumbled or scrambled mess, even though my story is clear in my head it just never comes out that way whenever I try to writeT_T So if you have time, care or interest please read this and tell me what you think, all criticism is welcome, just don't be too harsh, okay. Thank you, and any help and or advice would be highly appreciated.

Chapter 1

‘I know this isn’t the way things are meant to be.’

The thought echoed in his mind. ‘It is not meant to be like this… I…’

‘I am…’

The thought stopped there. Really who was he really, a demon, a lord, someone with the potential to rule over vast lands with an army of demons unrivaled in the known world, all crying in salutation and praise for… Sesshomaru…. Sesshomaru, all hail the great Lord? He could hear the words, the roar of the crowds pronouncing the all too familiar sound of his name with no less a force than the waves crashing upon the seas coast. He could hear it echoing along no differently in the background of… ‘who am I… am I really…. It is not supposed to be like this.’

‘… it’s not supposed to be like this!’

‘Damn it!’

A wave crashed against a rock, the force was harder this time for the white spray came noticeably closer. His eye caught upon the droplets as they fell and landed on the gray terrain before him. He felt it, even though he were yards away the slightest chill from the droplets as they came soaring through the air sending out waves of cold that vertebrate outwards to meet his skin. The sensation was no different than actual contact, being in such close vicinity. He took a mental note of it, but that was all. Even though such a skill was what made his power truly admirable, it was nothing new to him, since he was born with it.

It was in his makeup, having been born into such a high class and noble family his hearing and sense of smell weren’t the only senses about him that were keen he could also feel out the differences of the world around him, a skill which ran in the family. Every hair on his body was like a tiny antenna, where even the tiniest feeling like a falling droplet of water could send tremors running through him signaling to him that a droplet had fallen. It’s how he was always aware even when asleep, that something was happening or all was calm his body knew it before his mind does, sometimes long before; it’s one of the secrets to his skill, as well as to his power.

Consciously he would be aware of this and every time attribute as much of it to his pride as the mental note accounted for. It now told him that many droplets fad fallen and that they had come closer, much closer. He looked to the horizon.

But there was something else his senses were telling him.

The winds were blowing harder now. The sky has been fully overcast since daybreak, but it wasn’t until an hour ago did he care to notice. The sky was dark, grayish blue with a hint of green, a storm was brewing, and it was Typhoon season. That time of the year, and a single great storm had yet to have its say over the lands of this mortal world.

How strange it felt to realize he was an immortal being in a mortal world, and how alien this recognition made him feel being so far away from where he rightfully belonged, as though he had crossed into a strange foreign land. Though he had walked these paths countless times before, only now did it occur to him how different he truly was, from what lay around him, and from the very trepidation which brought up from his gut, he was a lord, he was superior… he was….

He gritted his teeth. He was… bleeding.

It has been one day since the encounter but his wounds had yet to close on their own. He knew the reason for this, it was shock. Such trauma had its way to affect the body’s functions, and in this case prevented him from healing. He just couldn’t accept it…. How… how did this happen…. When did I become so weak?

Weakness, it had to be…. He was injured and there was n excuse for that. What else could it be?

What else could it have been?

A day ago he came upon this demon, was he just being careless… a demon he had assumed was of no particular threat to him, and yet before he had successfully slew the fool for annoying him, the demon managed to get in one good hit on him.

A common ogre, with its spiked mallet, and he doesn’t know how it really happened but somehow before the beast succumbed to the form of rubble on the grass of the valley where the incent occurred the ogre somehow manage to swing his mallet well enough to have hooked his left shoulder and grazed it with a deep red bruise.

The shock of this drove Sesshomaru to kill this beast with far more power than was clearly necessary. It was only for a instant that he let his anger get the better of him, but it was enough to send the body of that ogre, a creature that was at least ten times his size into bite sized parts… too bad he doesn’t eat ogre, this would have been far too convenient. But he was no such beast, and the scent of the ogre’s blood only disgusted him, so he moved on. Ignoring the dulling pain that nagged from his shoulder as he moved on, however not a moment too soon.

“Sesshomaru!”

Came the familiar voice. It was Inuyasha, and of course it was. Only he would pop out of the woodwork at a time like this… what?

“What did you do with that ogre? Where is it?”

Hm, Sesshomaru thought to himself as he glared back at him, covering his curiosity with his typical mask of ice. What is this idiot babbling about, why would he care about some forgettable ogre? But the demand came again, “Sesshomaru, what did you do with it?”

“I killed it.” Came the obvious response. What else was there to say, the facts were obvious. The blood was in the air and his back was to the valley where the remains lay. What other outcome could be more obvious? He was Inuyasha, his nose had to be as keen to pick up the right messages, he was of the same blood line, just being a damn half-breed couldn’t affect his skills that much could it? Could it?

“Damn you Sesshomaru! I knew it!”

This was confusing and a bit irritating, for who cares about a damn ogre, this boy was starting to annoy him more than usual, when Inuyasha spouted out, “Damn it, I knew I should have came sooner. That Ogre knew something about the demon that attacked our village. I had yet to make it talk. And you killed it!”

Oh, now it makes sense. He wanted information out of it. Hm, oh such a pity, Sesshomaru though then shrugged inwardly while passively turning away, all the while saying the words, “If your village was attracted who’s fault was it that it happened in the first place?” it was all he needed to say.

The ever predictable hanyou came flying. Sword unsheathed and flaring out, “damn you Sesshomaru… that beast almost killed Kagome!” The last syllable of his words fell just as their swords clashed, sending a flash of light out from the impact. The Tenseiga sang in unison with the Tetsuaiga’s searing roar. Of course he drew the Tenseiga, it was not a weapon, and at the moment he cared not to see the Tetsuaiga dissolve into a puddle of molten scrap metal from the power of his prized Bakusaiga. He only intended to block the attack, which he succeeded in doing with relative ease, however... baka.

Sesshomaru was in no mood for this, nor for Inuyasha at this particular moment and made a bold move to send the boy out flying well beyond the line of the trees with hopes that he’ll take the hint and get lost, but of course just as he should have known the last thing he heard was “Wind Scare!” the light from the attack blinded him, yet with his special skills was able to dodge the attack before the blades could cut him, but that wasn’t the end of his brother’s attack. For before he knew it Inuyasha was on top of him, swords clashed in mid air. Again he sent him flying before landing gracefully on his toes upon the soft ground, this time maybe… when his ears picked up, “Adamant Barrage!” Alarm struck him, just as a sudden pain struck through his arm and lower side, a lesser streak from his lower leg and he realized just as he moved that he had been hit. Though he blocked the majority of the greater shards some of the smaller ones and their splinters had pierced him. The shock was more than he could bear, for not only did that lowly creature from before get it hit on him, so did not his little brother, a hanyou. The fact must have been obvious for next he heard, “heh! How you like that! You Bastard!” Naturally it came with a nulling feeling to respond with silence; he would not justify his brother senseless words with as much as a retort. He sneered.

‘That little bastard actually hit me!’ At that instant he was soaring through the air. His body obviously sprang to action before his mind could catch up. And realized once it did that he had run away, he was soaring through the winds.

Knowing full well that he had escaped…. His right hand was clinging to the wound on his upper arm, blood pouring out from between his fingers like little messengers of his misfortune leaving a trail of crimson mockery behind him, not even conscious of the fact that the same was occurring from his abdomen and lower leg… but over all that he was running away… Away. Why, and from what?

He was humiliated, embarrassed beyond belief. Not only did he fail to win the battle and defeat his brother with ease, which he absolutely knew he could do, instead he fled. Fled, as though he had run from a fight… as if he knew fear, no, he knew that wasn’t the reason, it was not fear that drove him away, it was… it was…. what was it? Some form of dreaded apprehension stirred in him, was it from his heart, why did he run away? What was it he was really running from? Once again the words echoed in the depth of his mind… ‘No… it isn’t supposed to be like this…. Who am I?’
Bonnie was sitting in Indian style on the floor of Caroline’s room. A book was lying open and three candles were surrounding it. She vowed her hands and whispered the words on the pages.
The front door slowly opened and someone slowly walked upstairs. The latch of the door in Caroline’s room went down and the door slowly opened.
“I thought you couldn’t do magic anymore”
“Oh my God!” Bonnie shrieked. She quickly got up and turned on the light. She bent and blew out the candles. “What the hell are you doing here?” she whispered loud and reproaching.
“I missed you at the Homecoming...
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Klaus and Caroline were reaching the top of a 1050 feet tall tower. Caroline had no idea why she was going along with Klaus; all she knew was that she had to go with him.
Klaus let go of her and took the compulsion away. Caroline shook her head and turned to Klaus. “Where are we? Where did you take me?” she demanded to know.
“Vous êtes à Paris, mademoiselle” Klaus answered with a charming smile. He bowed, took Caroline’s hand and kissed it. His lips had barely touched her soft skin, when she jerked her hand.
“I don’t know what your angle is” Caroline started as she walked backwards....
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Veronica parked her car in front of the old building. She walked out of the car and Rachel, who had come with her, followed her. Veronica walked up to the door and opened. “Get inside” she told Rachel. After Rachel entered Veronica locked the door. She waved at the people in the back and they stopped with what they were doing. One of the guys came their way.
“Hello, Veronica” he said.
“Hello, Derek” Veronica replied. “How’s it going?”
“It’s going very good. They are getting really good. I think we have a real chance in beating those…”
“Abominations” Veronica said...
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The door of the Boarding House opened and Damon rushed downstairs. He had expected Katherine or Stefan, hoped for Elena, but neither of those three were standing in the doorway.
Bonnie raised her hand. “Before you get all hostile on me, let me explain”
Damon took a step back.
“As I’ve told you I know when I’m part of a conversation” Bonnie started. “Last night you and Elena had a fight, because you’re having trouble dealing with your issues. You and I both know most of that is on me”
Damon sighed annoyed. “Will you cut to the chase, please?”
“I want to help you” Bonnie...
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Damon raced inside the hospital, Elena tightly in his arms. A female doctor walked their way while she signed at a nurse. The nurse pushed a stretcher in their direction. While Damon lay her down, the doctor started asking some question.
“What happened?” was her most urgent question.
“She…she’s sick” Damon said trembling. “She has cancer. I took her home, but I shouldn’t have. She should’ve stayed here”
The doctor shone with a small flash light in Elena’s eyes. “Don’t worry, sir. She’s just sleeping” She looked up. “Who’s treating her?”
“I don’t know”...
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“You sure no one’s going to bust us here?” Derek asked a little concerned. They were standing in the gym.
“Positive” Damon said, with his eyes on a paper. “According to this paper there are no gym classes for the next couple of hours, so I think we’re good”
Derek nodded. “Okay” he said, still not sounding very reassured.
“Look, I don’t want to do this, so shut up and stop whining” Damon said short. Derek looked at him a little upset. “Sorry. I’m a little peevish. I wasn’t expecting to see you ever again and it definitely wasn’t on my Christmas list”
“Yeah,...
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Bonnie woke up after another rough night. Katherine wouldn’t be here until sundown. She was up to something. Bonnie didn’t need her magic skills to feel that.
Why didn’t Katherine just let her die? It was obvious no one was missing her. But maybe Katherine believed killing her wouldn’t be punishment enough. Maybe she wanted to make her suffer. After all Bonnie had made Damon suffer. But she wanted to make it right. Not because she suddenly started caring for Damon; she just wanted her best friend Elena back and for that she had to make it up to both of them. Though playing with their...
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Damon opened his eyes, but couldn’t see a thing. He tried to get up, but couldn’t move. “Elena?” Then he realized Elena was in the room next to his, probably fast asleep, so she wouldn’t hear him. He felt a sudden weight on the bed, but couldn’t rotate his head to check who it was that was crawling towards him. But it was Elena. Of course it was Elena. Who else would it be? She hooked her fingers in his and cuddles her face in his neck. He felt her warm breath on his cold flesh.
“I can’t move” Damon said hoarse.
“Sssh…Everything’s going to be fine”
Damon’s eyes widened...
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Gabe parked his car in front of the police station and looked aside at his wife. “You sure you want to do this?” he asked soft. “I could just go in there alone and you can wait for me” Rachel shook her head. “No, I, eh, I need to see it for myself” she said with a trembling yet determined voice. She unfastened her seatbelt and stepped out of the car, Gabe doing the same. He walked around the car and hooked his arm in his wife’s. They walked up the porch and entered the station. They headed for the desk when sheriff Forbes noticed them. She handed some papers to one of her deputies...
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Cas walked out of the room, while the nurses tied Daphne onto the bed. He leaned against the wall and felt his heart beating in his chest.
“It’s my fault” he heard Zoey said. She was leaning against the opposite wall. “I told her you only stayed with her because you feel sorry for her. And now look what she’s done to herself. What kind of sister am I? I know she’s not well and yet I leave her alone?”
Cas walked towards and lay his hand on her arm. “It’s not your fault, Zoey. You did the best you could”
Zoey shook her head. “I can’t do this anymore. It’s too much”...
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Cas and Meg reached the surface of the pool and Meg held her breath. She had forgotten how good Cas looked when he was all…wet. Cas took advantage of her inability to speak.
“I’m really sorry for everything I’ve said to you today” he began. “I never meant to say those things. I was thinking something, but what came out was the exact opposite. And then Balthazar said he and Kevin had put up a plan to kill you and I knew it was a setup, but I just had to come”
“Doesn’t matter” Meg said fast. “Let’s get out of here” she suggested. She freed herself and swum to the edge,...
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Balthazar looked around. He was standing on an open field, after he had been summoned.
“Did you come alone? Or should I expect that bossy ginger to pop up, too?” Kevin shouted.
“What do you need me for?” Balthazar wanted to know.
“The question is, what do you need me for” Kevin commented. “See, I have been watching you trying to waste Castiel and I have seen you fail over and over again. Well, your methods suck, even you have to admit that”
“I’m not really in the mood for an analysis of how much I suck at killing my brother” Balthazar replied, slightly sarcastic.
“That’s...
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As she walked outside she bumped into Dean. “Oh, you’re back” she noticed indifferent. “He’s awake” she filled the brothers in. “He’s your problem now. I’m out” She pushed Sam aside and walked away.
“Are we allowed to go in?” Sam wondered, pointing at the door. “I mean, all of us?”
“Why don’t you two go first, then I’ll go find Meg” Jo suggested.
“Why?” Dean asked.
“Because she seems upset” Jo answered obvious.
“So?” Dean shrugged uncaring. Jo rolled her eyes. “Some guys…” she muttered between her teeth, before taking off.
Dean opened the...
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Cas opened his eyes and rolled them to left. Meg was sitting next to his bed. He looked down and noticed he was holding something in his hand. He rolled his eyes to the right and saw the machines and the perfusion leading some kind of fluid medication into his veins. He frowned and tried to pull all threads out of his body.
“No, Cas, don’t do that” Meg tried to stop him. “You have to get better”
Meg didn’t understand. Medication or drugs was what triggered it. He wasn’t himself when he took them.
Cas opened his mouth to explain, but something entirely different was said.
“Get...
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Is it THAT HARD TO WRITE A STORY ABOUT A FAST HEDGEHOG!??!?!?!?!?!
Is it THAT HARD TO WRITE A STORY ABOUT A FAST HEDGEHOG!??!?!?!?!?!
The actual title is called, "Sonic and Tails and Knuckles go fishing." which is just horrible grammar to ignore commas.

You know a fan fiction is going to be AMAZING when there is even an error IN THE GODDAMN TITLE! >.<

Please, just shoot me now! I quit! I give up on my life, now please let me go!

......Fine, I'll review this....

Besides, it's not like me to do that anyways. BUT, I am warning you. People like this exist, people that write such horrid stories and call it a fan fiction.... It blows my mind! And today, I crush one of the worst ones out there.

It's time to look at, "Sonic, Tails,...
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“We’re home, Damon” Elena said. She and Stefan were helping Damon reach the porch, something he’d rather do alone, thinking he’d recovered enough.
“I’m going to open the door” Stefan said. He let go of Damon and ran to the door and opened it. Then he walked back at Damon and Elena. When he wanted to help Damon enter Damon pushed his arm away.
“I don’t need your help” he said pissed, avoiding to look at him.
Stefan looked helplessly at his ex, but she gave him a ‘what did you expect’ kind of look back. She helped Damon enter the house and Stefan walked behind them like...
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Damon almost let go and fell back, but Stefan tightened his grip on him and pulled him up. They were outside, standing in the wreckage that used to be Bonnies house. Damon jerked his hand and walked away from his brother.
“Damon, wait…” but Damon walked to Katherine, who came his way. She lay her hands on his upper arms.
“Are you alright? How do you feel?” she asked worried.
“Like someone who’s been tortured” he said with a faint smile.
“I’m sorry I wasn’t there to help you” Katherine said. “I had to keep an eye on Stefan”
“It’s okay” Damon reassured her. “Elena...
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When the door slowly opened Stefan raced to the door and as soon as Elena got in he slammed it. Elena started breathing fast when she saw the fury in his eyes. He’d been drinking human blood again. “Where the hell have you been?” Despite her fear Elena felt some anger too. “You have no right to act like a jealous boyfriend! You don’t own me!” she yelled. Stefan gripped her shoulders and shook her. “Where you with Damon? Answer me!” Tears rolled over Elena’s face. “Stop it, Stefan, you’re hurting me!” she sobbed. He let go of her and went with his fingers through his...
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