Disney's Bolt Article: BOLT PART 11 ANYTHING COULD HAPPEN AS A POLICE K-9 DOG

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BOLT PART 11 ANYTHING COULD HAPPEN AS A POLICE K-9 DOG

posted by boltpup

OK NOW BOLTS OPESITE IS WORKING WITH THE POLICE AS A K-9 & BOLT IS AS WELL BOLT & BOLTS OPESITE ARE GOOD FRIENDS NOW ANYWAY THEY HAD TO GO BUST SOME DOGFIGHTING BOLT STOPED THE DOGFIGHT BEFORE IT STARTED BOLT & BOLTS OPESITE WAS NAMED TOP K-9 OF THE MONTH THEY HAD ALOT TO DO EVERY DAY...BOLT WAS NOW LIVEING WITH BOLT OPESITE IN THE SAME HOUSE!! BUT BOLTS FAMLY DID NOT REALLY LIKE BOLT BEING A K-9 THEY LET THINGS GO BOLT & BOLTS OPESITE HAD A BIG DAY TODAY TO GO SAVE THE LIFES OF 500 DOGS IN 1 DAY!! SO ANYWAY BOLTS OPESITE WAS GETING MAD ABOUT WHAT IS HAPPENING TO ALL OF THE DOGS THEY HAVE TO SAVE THEM THEY ONLY COULD SAVE 350 DOGS SADLY THE OTHER 1,S DID NOT MAKE IT BOLT & BOLTS OPESITE WAS MAD AT THEM SELFS FOR LETING DOWN ALOT OF THE DOGS BUT THAT WHAT HAPPENS SOME TIME ON THE JOB BOLT WAS MAD AT THE WORLD FOR BEING MEAN TO DOGS LIKE THAT HE HAD TO GET RIGHTS FOR DOGS BUT IT WAS NOT GOING TO BE EZ AT ALL...3 YEARS LATER HE GOT DOGS RIGHTS & NOW DOGS ARE DOING MUCH BETTER IN THE WORLD BECAUSE OF DOG RIGHTS BOLT DIDNT HAVE TO BE A SUPERDOG TO SAVE LIFES HE JUST HAD TO BE A POLICE K_9 DOG:: NEXT TIME IS GOING TO BE BIG NEWS FOR BOLT WHAT IS IT GOING TO BE?

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theJF Pretty interesting stories! If I may, I shall endeavor to explain a few suggestions to you to make these stories even better for readability: 1) "Caps lock" is usually used for individual emphasis, indicating that someone is yelling, or for other unique circumstances. Try to just capitalize the first letter of sentences and people's/dog's names with "shift" instead. 2) Proper punctuation is something that seems unimportant at first, but is actually quite critical for helping your readers enjoy your stories. For instance your first sentence could've read: "OK, now Bolt's opposite is working with the police as a K-9 dog, and Bolt is, well, Bolt! Bolt and his opposite are good friends now, and work together well in the force." And so on... 3) Breaking up your story into paragraphs and sections of sentences, such as what I've been doing here, also greatly improves readability by separating the story into manageable and cohesive segments for your readers. These are some friendly suggestions for you in your future story submissions, and I will eagerly await your next installment. Good luck!

boltpup I GOT THE NAME ANYTHING COULD HAPPEN FROM THE ELLIE GOULDING SONG