I have decided to write a new version on Twilight. This one isn't as sappy, goody goody, or so emo at some points. don't get me wrong! I love me some twilight! but you all have to agree, there are some parts that are too sappy, too emo, and too goody goody :) I am planning on doing all books so here is the first "Sunrise" (get it..sunrise..twilight..yeah? no? ok) So...Here you go:)
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"Bella, could you come to the front. Bella, the front." Mike Newton's voice echoed through the store.
"Excuse me." I smiled apoligeticly at the couple I was helping and walked around them. "What is it?" I met Mike on my way there.
"You have a visitor." He wouldn't look at me and wisked right by me.
"Okay." I whispered to myself. I ran my hand down the items on the shelves, something I had done since I was little. I smiled as I thought back on the times I would grocery shop with Renee. I would run down the isle's my hand stuck out, my fingertips touching everything I passed.
I pulled my hand back and put it in my vest pocket as I reached the end of the isle. There he was, standing in is unhumaly, godlyness, smiling that same crooked, half-smile he gave me every other day, and my breath was caught in my throat. I slowly walked up to him and stopped when I was a few feet away. "Hey."
"Hi." He smiled.
"What are you doing here?" I gestured to the store, my hands still in the vest pockets.
"My family wants to meet you." He put his hands in his jean's pocket.
"Now?" I was begining to panick. I could feel my heart speed up, and Edward chuckled. I knew he could hear it.
"No." He chuckled. "Tomorrow."
"Oh." The thudding in my ears dulled. "Okay. What time."
"I could come pick you up at ten tomorrow morning." He suggested.
"Okay, yeah."
"Don't eat before you come."
"Why?" I could feel the confusion on my face.
"Esme insists on fixing you brunch." He smiled.
"She doesn't have to." I shook my head.
"Like I said, she insists."
I couldn't help the small smile that escaped my lips. "Okay." I nodded.
I guess I could start from the beining, so you would know what the crap I'm talking about and who the hell Edward is. Yeah, sounds like a good idea.
It was dark. Teetering on the line of 9 pm. A little sliver of the moon was showing a pale orange. There was no sign that the sun had even exisited now this time of March.
I had drove 1,500 miles now. Comming from Phenoix to Forks, Washington to live with my dad, Charlie. My mom and her new husband were going out of the country to live for a while. There was no way I was going to move somewhere where I couldn't read anything, couldn't speak the language, and couldn't set the food because again, I couldn't read or speak the language. I wouldn't even know wehre to start making friends. Seriously. I can't even say 'hi' in Portuguese.
I noticed the orange sliver had dissapeared behind the gray clouds of Forks. The stars were far and few inbetween and the only lights shining while I made my way down the curvy road were the headlights on my black VW CC. They where high lighting the mailboxes that were starting to line the road, telling me I was close to Charlie's. I was getting nervous to see him. It had been three years since I last saw him and I missed my dad. I was a Daddy's girl, what can I say? I tapped my fingers on the stearing wheel as the radio faintly played through the speakers, and I leaned foward in my seat, looking out for my mailbox.
I smiled when I saw the numbers and turned in the drive, putting it in park and turning off the engine. I popped the trunk, pulling out my back pack, duffle bag, and carrying suit case. I closed the trunk and walked my way to the door. IT swung open infront of me and I was inveleped in a strong hug.
"Bella!" My dad laughed. He pulled back and looked back at me with chocolate brown eyes like my own. "How was your drive?" He asked, taking my suitcase and bag.
"Long." I laughed.
He led me up the stairs to my old room. "I, uh, hope you like it."
It was painted a light blue. Dark brown furnature and a desk lined my walls. The wall that my bed was against was a pale yet bright yellow with a brown design. Dark brown curtins doned the windows and a large flat screen hung able the dresser.
"This is amazing. Did you do this?" I asked.
He laughed aloud. "Funny. No, Alice Cullen. Her and her family live behind the trees in the back. About half a mile. He's really great. She's comming up here tomorrow around lunch. She's a Jr this year too, so you will know someone."
"Thanks, Dad." I smiled and kissed his cheek. "I'm going to clean up then get into bed. It's been a long day."
"Alright." He kissed my head. "Good night, baby."
"Night, Dad." I whispered and he walked back down stairs.
I unpacked all my clothes, grabbed my beg and headed to the shower. I let the hot water run thorugh my hair, untighten my muscles and steam away my thoughts. When I steped out, I dressed in sweats and a t-shirt and climbed into bed.
I pulled the covers up over my chin as I listened to the soft rain hit my window. Before I could even get a coherent throught out, I sliped into sleep.
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"Bella, could you come to the front. Bella, the front." Mike Newton's voice echoed through the store.
"Excuse me." I smiled apoligeticly at the couple I was helping and walked around them. "What is it?" I met Mike on my way there.
"You have a visitor." He wouldn't look at me and wisked right by me.
"Okay." I whispered to myself. I ran my hand down the items on the shelves, something I had done since I was little. I smiled as I thought back on the times I would grocery shop with Renee. I would run down the isle's my hand stuck out, my fingertips touching everything I passed.
I pulled my hand back and put it in my vest pocket as I reached the end of the isle. There he was, standing in is unhumaly, godlyness, smiling that same crooked, half-smile he gave me every other day, and my breath was caught in my throat. I slowly walked up to him and stopped when I was a few feet away. "Hey."
"Hi." He smiled.
"What are you doing here?" I gestured to the store, my hands still in the vest pockets.
"My family wants to meet you." He put his hands in his jean's pocket.
"Now?" I was begining to panick. I could feel my heart speed up, and Edward chuckled. I knew he could hear it.
"No." He chuckled. "Tomorrow."
"Oh." The thudding in my ears dulled. "Okay. What time."
"I could come pick you up at ten tomorrow morning." He suggested.
"Okay, yeah."
"Don't eat before you come."
"Why?" I could feel the confusion on my face.
"Esme insists on fixing you brunch." He smiled.
"She doesn't have to." I shook my head.
"Like I said, she insists."
I couldn't help the small smile that escaped my lips. "Okay." I nodded.
I guess I could start from the beining, so you would know what the crap I'm talking about and who the hell Edward is. Yeah, sounds like a good idea.
It was dark. Teetering on the line of 9 pm. A little sliver of the moon was showing a pale orange. There was no sign that the sun had even exisited now this time of March.
I had drove 1,500 miles now. Comming from Phenoix to Forks, Washington to live with my dad, Charlie. My mom and her new husband were going out of the country to live for a while. There was no way I was going to move somewhere where I couldn't read anything, couldn't speak the language, and couldn't set the food because again, I couldn't read or speak the language. I wouldn't even know wehre to start making friends. Seriously. I can't even say 'hi' in Portuguese.
I noticed the orange sliver had dissapeared behind the gray clouds of Forks. The stars were far and few inbetween and the only lights shining while I made my way down the curvy road were the headlights on my black VW CC. They where high lighting the mailboxes that were starting to line the road, telling me I was close to Charlie's. I was getting nervous to see him. It had been three years since I last saw him and I missed my dad. I was a Daddy's girl, what can I say? I tapped my fingers on the stearing wheel as the radio faintly played through the speakers, and I leaned foward in my seat, looking out for my mailbox.
I smiled when I saw the numbers and turned in the drive, putting it in park and turning off the engine. I popped the trunk, pulling out my back pack, duffle bag, and carrying suit case. I closed the trunk and walked my way to the door. IT swung open infront of me and I was inveleped in a strong hug.
"Bella!" My dad laughed. He pulled back and looked back at me with chocolate brown eyes like my own. "How was your drive?" He asked, taking my suitcase and bag.
"Long." I laughed.
He led me up the stairs to my old room. "I, uh, hope you like it."
It was painted a light blue. Dark brown furnature and a desk lined my walls. The wall that my bed was against was a pale yet bright yellow with a brown design. Dark brown curtins doned the windows and a large flat screen hung able the dresser.
"This is amazing. Did you do this?" I asked.
He laughed aloud. "Funny. No, Alice Cullen. Her and her family live behind the trees in the back. About half a mile. He's really great. She's comming up here tomorrow around lunch. She's a Jr this year too, so you will know someone."
"Thanks, Dad." I smiled and kissed his cheek. "I'm going to clean up then get into bed. It's been a long day."
"Alright." He kissed my head. "Good night, baby."
"Night, Dad." I whispered and he walked back down stairs.
I unpacked all my clothes, grabbed my beg and headed to the shower. I let the hot water run thorugh my hair, untighten my muscles and steam away my thoughts. When I steped out, I dressed in sweats and a t-shirt and climbed into bed.
I pulled the covers up over my chin as I listened to the soft rain hit my window. Before I could even get a coherent throught out, I sliped into sleep.
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Please let me know what you think! If you read this, you MUST review!! It's my new law!
Alice was out with Bella and Nessie and then she has this wierd feeling in her stomach so she stops and says to bella."I think we should go home niw Im meen like right now"
"Why we can go back later whats wrong with you."
" erm....I feel like jasper is doing something he shouldnt be doing."
"oh well lets got then."
Bella and nessie and Alice all ran to the the cullens house as fast as they could.Bella went to go and see Edward with nessie and I went upstairs to go and see something IWalked in my room and I found Jasper and Rosealie Making out......
Iscream at the top of my lungs and start throwing things at them both then everyone runs upstairs and says " wgats wrong.Whats happened.Are yo hurt"
I replay with
"Yea Im hurt because i have just walked in my bedroom and found Jasper and Rosea lie making out "
" WHAT"
"yea jasper this is for you"
[Alice slaps Jasper across the face]
Alice runs off and then bella and Esme follow her.
"Why we can go back later whats wrong with you."
" erm....I feel like jasper is doing something he shouldnt be doing."
"oh well lets got then."
Bella and nessie and Alice all ran to the the cullens house as fast as they could.Bella went to go and see Edward with nessie and I went upstairs to go and see something IWalked in my room and I found Jasper and Rosealie Making out......
Iscream at the top of my lungs and start throwing things at them both then everyone runs upstairs and says " wgats wrong.Whats happened.Are yo hurt"
I replay with
"Yea Im hurt because i have just walked in my bedroom and found Jasper and Rosea lie making out "
" WHAT"
"yea jasper this is for you"
[Alice slaps Jasper across the face]
Alice runs off and then bella and Esme follow her.
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In my story, Edward is a smart over achiever, Emmett is in jail, and Bella is a mysterious next door neighbor with some issues.
Edward has to decide if he's going to risk everything for Bella, or if he's going to continue to please everybody around him and forget about her.
It's E/B AU-AH with heavy drama. I hope you take a look at at!!
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