The Winx Club Article: Will we ever get a happily ever after? prologue- following footsteps

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Will we ever get a happily ever after? prologue- following footsteps

posted by Princess-Flora

I just wanted to thank LoveBaltor for helping me figure out which girl would be which Disney princess.
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The group of sixteen had no clue what was about to come. All they knew is they would be following the footsteps of their parents. The weirdest part for was that 20 years ago all of their parents sat in the same room they would take the quiz that would bring the biggest mission towards them they have ever been through. Bigger than the army of decay, Lord Darkar and the shadow monsters, Valtor, The Wizards of the Black, Tritannus and the Trix; because if they didn’t complete their given fairy tale within three attempts they would be stuck their until the next generation would take this challenge; but they would then disappear into thin air like they never existed. The worst part is they could not back out once they write their name on the quiz; and one couple would use two attempts and on their third they would worry if they might get a happily ever after.

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lovebaltor You're welcome :) I'm a little confused with this opening though, tbh, so here's my little critique: Who are these sixteen people? If you count up all the Winx (including Roxy) and the Specialists (With Nabu), that only adds up to 13. This "following the footsteps of their parents" leads me to believe that this could possibly be the children of the Winx? A prologue is something that opens a story and establishes the setting and gives background details; usually an earlier story that ties into the main one. This [i]does[/i] provide some background details, but I don't think it gives enough. Who are these sixteen people? Are they the Winx and Specialists? Their children? The parents of the Winx and Specialists? This information would really make the intro to this story more coherent. And this quiz...why is it so important? How is this mission more dangerous than all other missions the Winx have faced? I know this can be explained in the first chapter, but a prologue should give more background knowledge than this. The ending was fine, and flowed much more smoothly than the beginning. The intro is what threw me off because you didn't provide the readers with enough detail.

florasedge31 @lovebaltor, pif (Princess-Flora) has an extra character that she uses as Flora's twin sister. which adds up to 14. I dont know who the other 2 are though. @pif, This sound really cool and I cant wait to read it.