OK, I know my previous fanfictions pretty much suck, so... Give me some feedback, please. I think that this site is dead. :( Also, I have a new-ish OC. Let me know if I get any facts off.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white coat hood tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to show the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do you have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black hood pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do you have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She said in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya or something." "Aslyxia, you pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up by me for the story.)
~Five Minutes Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because you are older and male, you can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are you cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the seat as I lean against the wall of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her hood off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I swing my legs off the seat and sit normally. "I hope you are a good partner, Edward. I can discard you from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered by this. He shoots back, "What do you have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white coat hood tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to show the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do you have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black hood pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do you have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She said in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya or something." "Aslyxia, you pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up by me for the story.)
~Five Minutes Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because you are older and male, you can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are you cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the seat as I lean against the wall of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her hood off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I swing my legs off the seat and sit normally. "I hope you are a good partner, Edward. I can discard you from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered by this. He shoots back, "What do you have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
which caused so much sacrifice and misery unknown.
Deceptively though, the stone did appeal
and made foolish men think its happiness real.
O wise philosopher you must grieve no more
if you wish to revive the mirth of before.
You must face your past, for you cannot atone
for the damage you wrought with the wretched red stone.
Where is the land? That land from the past,
which many before you sought and amassed?
Take heed of their folly, and don't be deceived
by the trap which left many despaired and bereaved.
Though for happiness, power and ease they did strive,
instead they found death and now none are alive.
Consider these perished; this warning adhere.
Will you continue to seek out this stone you held dear?
You who beheld it’s baneful hue red
when the blood of your own arm and own leg was shed?
Stone of philosophers, ruby red stone.
When will you cease and leave mankind alone?