Writing Article: Back and Forth

posted by amutokitty

Just a horrible short story with hardly any plot whatsoever... Don't kill me because of my awful work, please! Constructive criticism needed!

She sat by the ocean, mesmerized by the constant flow of the ocean.
Back and forth, back and forth.
He was standing on the cliff, watching her in her daze. The picture was peaceful and calm, and he wished it would stay the same forever, just like the motion of the ocean.
Back and forth, back and forth.
She stood up and picked up a seashell. It was a pale blue color, a truly beautiful shell. She walked out towards the ocean.
Back and forth, back and forth.
His eyes followed her. 'So beautiful...' he thought, watching Kassandra on her way into the ocean.
Back and forth, back and forth.
Kassandra scooped up a bit of the salty water and let it run through her fingers. She turned around and sat back on the white sand.
Back and forth, back and forth.
He noticed her drawing something on the sand. He leapt down from the cliff, and began walking towards her, wanting to see what she was drawing.
Back and forth, back and forth.
She drew a love umbrella. An arrow pointing up, a heart at the top. On each side of the line, she wrote a name: Kassandra | Peter
Back and forth, back and forth.
He walked up to her and sat down next to her. "Hey." he said, startling her. "Wh-what are you doing here, Peter?!" she asked. "What are you making?" Peter asked, looking down at her creation.
Back and forth, back and forth.
She blushed sharply as he looked down on her creation. She looked away until she felt a warm hand on her cheek.
Back and forth, back and forth.
He pulled her face so she was looking him in the eye. "I love you, Kassandra." Peter said, his stormy blue eyes peering into her mint green ones.
Back and forth, back and forth.
She smiled and leaned in to kiss him. He wrapped his arms around her as they kissed, forever remembering the sound of the waves on that day at the beach.
Back and forth, back and forth.

amutokitty For those who don't know, a love umbrella is something you draw in the sand. It's basically an arrow point upwards, with a triangle and a straight line going down. Then, on each side of the line, you write your name and your lover's or crush's name, and it's said that, if you do so, than you'll be bound together forever.

tigerseye43 I liked it. but at first it said his name was peter but then it said Hayate

amutokitty WHOOPS! originally, it was a fanfic, so I thought it wouldn't make much sense, so I changed the names. THANK YOU FOR POINTING OUT THE FORGOTTEN NAME!

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Wanting Someone - Chapter Thirteen

posted by Lindy52

A/N: WARNING! SEX SCENE BUT NOT THAT TYPE OF SEX BECAUSE I GET WELL, UNWELL OF THAT BUT STILL READABLE! ALSO, THIS CHAPTER HAD A VERY IMPORTANT ENDING, I THINK.

Chapter Thirteen

When Jamie and Sean got inside Jamie’s home, put the bags of food on the kitchen counter, put Jake in his playpen and gave him a toy to play with, and the moment they saw a smiling Jake and completely ignoring them by admiring his toy, Jamie and Sean grinned at each other and to get it started, they ran upstairs to Jamie’s bedroom and closed the door.

The moment they got inside, Jamie got rid of Sean’s light blue...

Who Knew?

posted by rebaj2010

Chapter 1

Looking back i regret everything i did to her. not only was she the best thing in my life she was also the only thing.
A cool breeze comes rushing through the open door to the warehouse. Samsion walks in with a case of beer.
"Finally, stupid ass, took you long enough." a guy comment from the back.
All the Mexicanos in the room tackle my best friend for the beers and he come sits with me. we just sit there, he knows i dont want to talk. he gets up and hands me a beer, giving me a sypathatic look that pisses me off. i dont want sympathy, i want Rebecca.
"You know you can talk about it with...

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It's hard, but you'll get threw it.

posted by TOTALFan

Kyle:Krissa, it's ok, everything will be fine.

Krissa:No it won't!!!How can he do this to me!...how can he do this to us!

Me:He didn't...he did it to be happy.

Krissa looked at me with watery eyes, tears falling, dripping from her face.

Kyle:Kris, he is your father, but he just needs to move on and live a happier life.

Me:Exactly, he never wanted to hurt you like this, he loves you, but he loves her, too.

Krissa:If he did love me, he'd dump that barbie!

Kyle looked at me, I looked at him.

Kyle:She needs some time alone.

I nodded.
I hurt the thump sound of when Krissa jumps on her bed.

Me:Maybe she'll grow out of it in a few days...

Kyle:Or a few years...why is she so...upset of her dad getting married?

Me:Well, when she went to visit him, she was just there, he never told her.She got mad and came right back.

Kyle:Well that IS upsetting.

Me:No kidding.

the first life

posted by dbzfan5

CHAPTER 1* the deepest abyss* in the ocean in the deepest abyss were no sign of light could be found little particles started to come together forming a strange creature that had the head of a human but as pail as the skin on a grate Wight, a shark fin on its back, gills on the outer skin were its lungs are, arms of a praying mantis, six gel like tentacles on its back, with the body and legs of a human! Two of them were made one boy one girl they quickly swam to shore *CHAPTER 2 there’s more of us* we got up to shore and found a little island and swam to it finding more like us! Peek the...

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Seeking Eden

posted by Cinders

It has been said that those with no words often have the most to say.

New York City, circa 1992.

He was quiet, a secret sort of troubled, his hands buried deep into his pockets as he wandered the slums of a black city, a heavy shadow cast over the sky that was too dark for the stars to penetrate.

She was a bloodnut and she watched him from the shadows, her dead heart rattling inside of her empty chest. She launched herself at him and latched onto his arm like a leech, beginning to beg, offering services in exchange for the substance she craved so much. Just a taste, she said, she promised that...

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Alright, so I'm writing a story, and I want your opinions.

posted by savvy99

This is just an excerpt, so it might be kinda confusing, but still, let me know please!

"    She was surrounded, there was no way to go, no where to turn. Circling around, trying to formulate a plan, a stab of pain coursed through her veins, bringing her to her knees. Another shot brought her a face-full of colorful carpet. Someone from behind tied her hands together in some unknown bindings and pinned her thrashing body to the ground with the help of a few others.
    “Check her.”
    That voice… where Have I heard it before?
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A true story

posted by inexplicable

The last time

The day was gray and it was raining outside. There were hardly any people seen on the streets, but I ran, soaked by the rain, down the street. I walked toward a house, but went unnoticed on the opposite side of the street. I looked up to the building and reminded me again at that time, to events to which I recalled many years later. It is in this house he lived not too long ago. Whether we were just friends, or maybe even more than that, I still do not know. I called me back the memory of an evening that was not even long ago. We were in his room and he played me on the piano before...

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My special halloween

posted by Theatre_Freak

Once upon a time there was a little place called the 13 colonies. In one of these colonies lived little old m,e Angelina, but there was something different. In my colony, everyone was the same; we all had animals grew crops and so on, but I was special. Originally, I lived in Paris, France with my mother and father. After my father died when I was just a baby, my mother noticed that I had a gift that only few had in our family. I was a Witch.
My mother feared for my safety and made a deal with her sister. Her sister was a specialist in the dark arts of magic. Mother didn't trust her, but she...

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Mary Sue

posted by Anudie

Once upon a time, in a perfect world there stood a perfect pink castle guarded by a perfect number of perfect fluffy horses and surrounded by a perfect wall of perfect pink flowers.
In the perfect castle there lived a perfect, perfect girl with a perfect life. Her perfect name was perfect: Serenity Lianna Honeyblossom Sweetytreat Sparkle Cupcake Beauty Mary Sue.
She was always paid by authors to star in their books and act like the perfect dream girl; aka a Mary Sue. She lived in Storyland, where all the ideal characters lived until they were picked for a story and then dropped back in after....

Help? Ideas, anyone?

posted by cute20k

Hi! I was writing a novel a while back, but I got distracted. I have only written the first chapter. I feel as if I need better names for the characters. I believe I'm going to edit the first chapter a lot and bring in some other characters. For the main 2 characters I was thinking I would name them something foreign that has a meaning to do with love, to be a little cutesy. Also, title suggestions would help! If you choose to follow the link below the female character's description, let me know if you have any names for the 2 cheerleaders mentioned.

Edit: For 'Jo'/female I was looking up names...