The novel is about a girl who loses her father and ultimately loses herself, having to claw her way back to sanity. This is the first chapter of the first novel I've stuck with, so please give any constructive criticism.
Every year, I write five individual short stories for my a few of my family for Christmas. This was my 2009 Christmas short for my cousin, just let me know if you'd care to read more.
Constructive criticism is welcome!
Ariel is a sixteen year old girl who finds out that she can control all 4 elements: fire, earth, wind, water and she is the only one who can also wield the fifth element, spirit.