please could people read this fanfic and give me feeback? so i can see whether to write another?

I just read it and all i can say is...OME (oh my Edward)!!!! That was amazing!! Really really impresive!! YOU NEED TO WRITE MORE THINGS FOR ME TO READ PLEASE!!! one quesion....if you dont mind me asking, how old are you? Again, great job! You should be very proud! :)