Creative Outlet My poem, Can you tell me if you like them?

raknaff posted on Jan 24, 2009 at 02:30AM
Darkness

I feel the cold enrap my fingers
There is no light
I open my eyes and all I see is night

My eyes as hard as coal
The cold fills up my body
It's like I'm falling through a hole

Theres no one there at all
The silence screams the truth
I try and feel a wall
Theres nothing there at all

My heart as hard as stone
My fingers as cold as ice
Who would leave me here all alone

Although no ones there
I don't feel scared
The quiet makes me calm
I feel like I belong

I float through the dark air
I look down even though I know no ones there
Thats when I realized I am Become Death

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over a year ago rpattz_21 said…
smile
thats really really good....
over a year ago Galbraith said…
big smile
I genuinely really like this - makes everything I've ever done look crap lol =D
over a year ago jacob4ever57 said…
big smile
lol yea same here Galbraith i feel like my poems are just like done by a 5 year old lol but dude you are soooooo good that's awesome!!
over a year ago KristinaDawn said…
aww i love that poem:D its sooo cute(:
over a year ago elizasmomma said…
smile
i love tht poem its very dark and mysterious