One thing which I really like about the script you sent me is the fact that new technology is used (ex: smartphones) , comparing to other movies which are made today, but just seem to stay in the past. I am mainly talking about remakes of movies which have been made before, or sequels. This was one of the first things which caught my attention.
I think that, if we introduce more of the new technology and evens words together with references which would make people laugh is a good idea. Take the smartphone for example. I do not really know if there are any copyright infringements on using modern...